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No Dream is taken by the Sea
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No Dream is taken by the Sea |
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TrueLUV Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 158Connecticut, U.S.A. |
Walking near the evening sea I dreamed a dream that could not be I said to myself she would never be with me The sea then answered that her heart belongs to me While the waves plunged heavily against the shore they told me dreamer, dream no more And as the flowers crept through mother earth to recieve the energy of birth I then began to cry like a child would if a bird suddenly died I screamed out to the sea But no reply came to me But I remembered how it once told me that her heart belonged to me [This message has been edited by TrueLUV (edited 12-22-2000).] |
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kimmy Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 98 |
this was a great poem...the imagery was amazing and it was full of emotions...good job... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was great.......i liked it a lot. Hope to see you title it soon.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
i totally agree with dopey cant wait for a title. it was very powerful espacailly your ending. "I screamed out to the sea But no reply came to me But I remembered how it once told me that her heart belonged to me" |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a really powerful piece, full of beautiful imagery and strong emotions. All poetry should be like this. Thanks for posting. "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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DreamerGrl27 Member
since 2000-10-29
Posts 142 |
This was so amazing...I really loved the whole thing. You made your emotions so clear that I felt as if I was feeling everything. Great job |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
A very well done poem, I liked reading it. The ending was wonderful, nice job  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
I am getting a bit slack here... I don't know how this got to page 3 and I hadn't seen it, Im glad it didn't get too much further... this is a great poem and you have done a wonderful job expressing these feelings and relating them to mother earth... great job!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
awesome!!! wow!!! speechless!!! 3 words: I love it I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
wow, this was really cool... i loved how you used the sea to answer the questions! great job! ~JDR "A writer doesn't acquire a vacancy of mind, but rather a inadequacy of words." - Jeremy D. Raulinaitis |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
wonderful work!! i look forward to more posts ~*Pixie*~ |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Wow. I'm speechless. Awesome!  ~*Skyfire "I am Canadian" - Joe If you set limitations upon yourself, it's no wonder you fall short of your dreams - Rhonda J. Adolph |
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