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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
Empty Words Empty words and useless phrases. Life begins in ugly dazes. Look at all you've created. Look at problems you've situated. People walking with no destination. Smiles fading in desolation. Truth muddled by bitter laughter. Hate reimbursed by better after. What life gives you is all you deserve. Memories, too destroyed to preserve. The world, too muck reality to take. The soul, too many wounds of ache. Injustice brings the damned in view. Stand to see this hatred brew. What much more can people bare? What more pain can these hearts spare? These empty words and useless phases. This life ends in dusty hazes. 12-13-00 [This message has been edited by Ron (06-25-2011 10:04 AM).] |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
WOW gurl this is a powerful write... I luv the flow of the poem and the pace of it read aloud is sooooooo intense...  coco |
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apsara Member
since 2000-11-09
Posts 70 |
Wow.Powerful words and its all so deep. Great scheme. Wonderful read. apsara |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
"Truth muddled by bitter laughter. Hate reimbursed by better after" This is a really powerful piece. I also love the way it flows. These certianly aren't "empty words". Thanks for sharing. "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
perfect title Salm! "Injustice brings the damned in view. Stand to see this hatred brew." that was great! i agree with lovebug, these arent empty words jeremy r "...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I have a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
As the others said, wonderful flow! This poem is so well done, great job  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was great. I really liked the flow and style of it all.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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kimmy Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 98 |
i agree...i luved the flow of this poem..and i really liked it..it was great...keep em coming.. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
i agree beautiful flow and style. very powerful.keep em coming. Regina |
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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
Niiice. I liked this very much...good work Salma.. Very powerfully expressed... Vreni |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
wow...certainly didn't expect all of these replies....i thought this poem was horrible, but thanks so much for your replies everyone Salma |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This poem ain't horrible...This is probably one of the best of yours that I've read. Thanks for the share Salooma. Things will get better, just have faith  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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