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If You Loved Me Too
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If You Loved Me Too |
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DreamerGrl27 Member
since 2000-10-29
Posts 142 |
If You Loved Me Too I'd stay in your arms forever If you promised not to let me go, I'd love you till the day I die If you told me you loved me so. I would hold your hand forever If you would come take mine, I'd trust you with my life If you said everything will be fine. I'd kiss your lips forever If I knew they'd always be there, I'd give you all my heart If you said you'd treat it with care. I'd look into your eyes forever If yours were looking back at me, I'd open up your heart for you If you would just give me the key. I'd talk to you forever If I knew you would be here, I'd never be scared of anything If you would dry my every tear. I'd wait for you forever If I knew your love was true, I'd tell you that I love you If I knew you loved me too. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
This was awesome. I was totally feeling it. Sounds like somethin id write.  Good job...i wanna read more!!~!*DQ*!~ ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Great poem and I can agree with it... if only it were that simple!! Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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apsara Member
since 2000-11-09
Posts 70 |
That sums everything up. It left me tearing at the end and I'd have to agree with Melstar. If only it were that simple. Great one. I loved how you expressed it all. apsara |
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DreamerGrl27 Member
since 2000-10-29
Posts 142 |
Please reply if you can guys...I really wanna know what you think b/c I have to hand it in for a newspaper at school...thanks. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
That's a lot of "If"'s! I think it's good though, and think would be great in a paper "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
Beautiful! Regina |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I think regina covered it all with that one word.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Hey Trace!! I think i told you this but i think you should hand it in to Mr.Pitch (or whoever it is who runs it) and im shur he'll submit it into horizon...I thought thi was great and it had a lot of heart, feeling and emotion in it..i can also relate to it and i fall absolutely in love with poems that have a meaning in my life..great job babe! Love yaz  muahz |
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TrueLUV Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 158Connecticut, U.S.A. |
A very powerful poem I felt every line I hope that he read this and understood. Keep up the great work...remember TrueLUV is out there |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
this is so beautiful and so sweet!!! katherine |
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DreamerGrl27 Member
since 2000-10-29
Posts 142 |
Thanks for your replies guys!! |
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sweetypie5 Member
since 2000-10-06
Posts 97MWC,OK,USA |
Wow this is such a good poem! Way to express ur feelings! If only guys were that way!!!(No offense)Well keep writing! |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
I think this poem is wonderful. It's like you read my thoughts because i have been thinking this way towards a certain guy Now i know if i ever want to show him how i feel i can just show him your well written poem. (i won't take credit for it i promise!!!!!)*do not offer yourself to the world, yet let the world offer itself to you*--Me :) |
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