Teen Poetry #3 |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
)}i{( Memories )}i{( Memories untouched, shoved to the back of my mind To be forever forgotten, for no one to find Tucked away for safe keeping, never revealed The door shut, locked, and sealed I find myself pushing things away To the place where memories are to stay I'm not ready to reminisce, I can't move that fast I'm not ready for the pain that comes with the past So many memories, never to fade Hidden behind a wall that I have made -=-=just a lil thing i threw together last nite cause i couldnt fall asleep=-=- ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
DQ~ I love it!!!And its even better that this has nothing to do with your personal life. Keep up the good work girl!!! People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts. |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Great poem - and good job! Sometimes the best peices come when we aren't really trying to think of them and they just pop into our heads!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was really nice. The flow was great and the wholeness of the poem was wonderful. Great job on this one! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
DQ, I really like this poem of your's it has a delicateness in it's expression yet it has the sparks of hesitancy of an aching heart... Great write sweetie you done well here... coco [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 12-19-2000).] |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
ERIN~ hey babe lol u crack me up we need to talk again!! Melster~its rare that it takes me a long time to write a poem. unless im so upset about something i cant even put my emotions down on paper.. DopeyDope~ hey hey a nice comment from you Kidding!! thanks babe Coco~ thanks so much means alot that you liked it!! ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
"DQ" reminds me of Dairy Queen which has good ice cream, but it's so cold and snowy out that just thinking of ice cream makes me colder. uh......anyway....excellent job on this one!! I have to agree with Dopey, the flow is wonderful "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Lakewalker~ LOL yeah when i first started puttin DQ i thought dairy queen right away. Makes me extra special to have double meaning kidding!! But thanks for replying ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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kimmy Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 98 |
this was soooo good...i loved it...it was short and sweet and still had a good rhythm to it...it was great... |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
I very rarely reply to oth people's poems these day but every one of your poems I have read relate to my life in some way. Just like what your poem said I always push memories to the back of my mind because they are painful. But no matter how hard I try not to think about the painful memories they always have and always will haunt me. But anyway awsome poem keep up the great work. Lauren |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
everyone has memories they want to forget wether it be seroisu or sort of silly. nice rythm to the poem. Regina |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Some of the fav poems of mine were thrown together like at 3 am when i couldnt fall asleep..lol it works!! I thought this one was great..sometimes its not the best idea to reminisce on past experiences and thoughts..sometimes i guess its better to leave better off alone...Great job gurl!! Muahz |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
it's good! katherine |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
hey sweets --- you know, I've seen your poetry/writing grow everytime I read a new post from you. I guess you are headed the right direction. Though it's not really good that we have to go thru all these uncertainties and unfairness in life for us to be able to write with such passion. Basically, it seems like missery is the architect of our talent in writing. Enough of that. What more can I say about this. Everyone else has praised it with which it undeniably deserves. Man, I'm trying to talk like I'm brainy or something lol....Seriously peach, I love it!!! keep writing I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
thanks everyone for replying ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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