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Your Sweet
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Your Sweet |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Your Sweet I saw you standing alone You were holding some bags A young boy came to help you You replied "your sweet" He said "thanks" It started to rain He could sense it He had his umbrella You were very grateful And you replied "your sweet" While crossing the street He got hit by a car You said "he was sweet" He died at 1 am You could sense it At the funeral you stood and Just said "your sweet" You knew he was there He replied "thank you" You said "goodbye" Someone stood to say "your sweet" |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
wow...you just started writing?! That was one of more interesting and touching theme's I've run into in a while. Keep those comin...please!! Jeremy D. Halstead "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Impressive! I hope to see much much more of your work! This was a very touching theme, something that a lot of writers today struggle with. I'm glad some of us still maintain the essence of what just a few words can say and do. Keep it up! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~ ~*~Love is the product of our dicontentment with ourselves~*~ ~*~SMILE! It makes your butt shine!~*~ |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
i like the view point you use on this piece and the idea please keep it up i always like to read new things and new people and your someone i want to keep reading. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Thanx Jess, Jeremy, and Jeramiah. I am glad that you enjoyed my poem. I enjoyed reading yours as well. Talk to you all later. Email me if you ever wanna chat. Luv always, Chel "True friends stab you in the front" |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
Moving piece of work. Glad you joined us. Your style reminds me of a friend of mine's. The simple truth conveyed is worth more than words. Tap2 |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This has some interesting viewpoints in it... I really enjoyed it. "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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AndrewDL Junior Member
since 2000-07-02
Posts 24California |
the poem was very moving. it reminds me of "mid-term break" by this poet that i could never remember the name of. Great poem, truely enjoyable. -Andrew |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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