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Minister of Dissonance Junior Member
since 2000-12-10
Posts 20 |
torn by a love i could not know weighed down by an idol of stone known once upon a time as the human heart exposed on a hill to the abusive sun with chest torn wide by searing knives mind torn asunder by lobotomistic smiles and nothing more with which to live than the splintered remains of a fire-tempered wooden heart |
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kimmy Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 98 |
wow...i loved thie poem...welcome to passions...it was short and yet full of meaningful powerful words..good job...glad you joined... |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Welcome to Passions Minister of Dissonance! We are very happy you have decided to join our community of poetry friendship. This is a very powerful first post ... very dark and descriptive. I hope to read more of your poetry and your responses to our wonderful family of poets! (check your e-mail for a special message) Best wishes, /Kit |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
 Welcome to Passions Great first poem here, I think you're going to fit in great. I hope you enjoy it here  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! This poem was short and sweet yet very very powerful with its words. I liked it a lot and i cant wait to see more from you! Welcome! |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hi there! Welcome to Passions. I really, really loved this. Lots upon lots upon lots....the way it was written kinda makes me shiver...great job. ~Carly |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
welcome to passions!!! amazing poem....sometime short poems convey the most powerful emotions!!! Regina aka Ina |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Deep, dark, expressive. Not bad at all! Welcome to Passions!!xoxo Jenn "A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ?? |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Welcome to Passions pal. Good poem, I love the transition on how the heart was there.....being torn......and then on a hill taking the abuse from the sun. I would think it'd turn into some sort of raisin dried heart but apparently became wooden. Good job, tons of symbolism. A wonderful read.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Minister of Dissonance Junior Member
since 2000-12-10
Posts 20 |
thank you all dope (doesn't seem right to call you 'dopey'): the ancient greeks and romans used to rid themselves of unwanted or illegitimate children by "exposing" them on a hillside -- in other words they left them out in the sun unprotected and they would either die from the beating of the sun's merciless rays upon their silken skin or would be devoured in short order by any number of hungry, roving animals. this is the practice to which i refer in line four. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Welcome to passions!!!I hope that you enjoy it here!!! Good first post...Hope to see more by you!!! People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
You seem to be wise beyond your years. I love the story behind what happened to your heart then. Wonderful! Really interesting stuff, I must say. Keep it coming! I really like to read everything you post up. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
This is great. I really admire your work. "Wise beyond your years," indeed you are. Look forward to more posts from you. "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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