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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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NOTE: Well this is one of the first poems i made for the 6th Round. LOOOOONGGG time ago, i probably did this in July. Anyway......I hope you liked it. Broken Fate: 1 Betrayal 2 let downs Infinite confusions 3 hell holes 4 depressions Infinite dillusions. Numbers of nothing. Days lost within. Time wasted away, The life I trim. Blind with love. Full of hate. Beware your heart. It's broken, it's fate.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Tears of Glass Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 182Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure |
Wow... Awesome poem! It makes you think.. I love this stanza: "Blind with love. Full of hate. Beware your heart. It's broken, it's fate." I love reading your poems. You're so talented. Keep em coming! *Jennifer |
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silvrduck Member
since 2000-11-05
Posts 146 |
Whoa, this is a great poem!! Same as Jennifer.. i love that stanza. Keep up the great work Dopey! Take care, Sarah with the unknown comes no expectations in this i find my peace |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Hey Dopey i really liked this one!!! You really do have a lot of talent...i especially liked this one cause it flowed so nicely and it made a lot of sense to me. Great job  |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Wow!! It's GREAT! I love it Bel |
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Minister of Dissonance Junior Member
since 2000-12-10
Posts 20 |
irony and anger *hehe* the great dissonant one |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I think this is good, I really like the first two stanzas. Something about it just didn't do it for *ducks tp being thrown at him* I mean I love it, nice job  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Hallie_Angel Member
since 2000-12-06
Posts 102 |
Hey. I thought your poem was good, I am having writers block wright now. Oh well this will only last a day or so. Where do you live? I and Allysa live in Ohio. We live near Dayton and both go to St.Peters and are in the 8th grade. We have the meanest teacher alive!!! Hey I think I have an idea buh-bye dopey!!! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Thanks everybody for reading this poem. Hallie, I lived in San Juan, Puerto Rico. OHhhhhhhh yea..... well anyway thanks guys! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
hmmm.... I must have missed this one. I think was really good. It's kinda cool to see one of your older poems. thanks for sharing. ps ~ I read those poems you told me to check out a while back on ICQ(Arrogant Reformer, Perspective, Jack in a box), thx for pointing me tward those poems... I really liked them. I'm going to have to check out some more of the stuff I missed from ya. any how.... L8r IsGona "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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