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Can't have you
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Can't have you |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC 
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I thought I lost you so I tried to move on You know I still love you even though you are gone But I can’t sit here, lonely, waiting for you You’re with another so I don’t have to stay true So I found someone new, someone sweet and kind Someone who cares about me, and wants to be mine Life began to look up, if I only had a clue The next time that phone rang, it would be you I can’t have you here Messing up a good thing Can’t believe how much my life changed When I heard that phone ring Coming back as just friends, but we both know the truth And if our better halves did, they’d hit the roof Cause I care about her, but I still love you And you say you love him, but I’m on your mind too This thing isn’t over between you and me But this is hurting us both, can’t you see We can’t be just friends, and we’re not ready to be together Cause I can’t trust you, your mind changes like the weather I can’t have you here Messing up a good thing Can’t believe how much my life changed When I heard that phone ring If you say you love him, then prove it to me We aren’t just friends, and you don’t want more, so just leave me be Can’t concentrate on her when you’re still in my head Won’t hurt either of you, I’d rather be dead It’s not fair for us to be so confused inside Cause our feelings can’t be shared, have to run and hide So let’s put away our pride and face the fear I know in time we’ll be together, but for now I can’t have you here. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I think you explained this situation well, the feelings sound so real in your writing. This seemed to be kinda in the form of a song, is this a song? Anyway, nice job  "It’s not fair for us to be so confused inside Cause our feelings can’t be shared, have to run and hide" "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
I didn't mean for it to be a song, I just thought that it would work out good to repeat that part, so I guess it is in the form of a song but unintentionally. Jon |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought this poem was amazing. i liked it so much. GREAT job on this one. Really great. I can so relate to it cuz i went through this recently. HORRIBLE thing to go through. Good luck pal!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Thanks Dopey, it is a terrible thing to go through. Just wanted to get a little more feedback. Jon |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
This was really great. I haven't really felt like this, but I'm not in a real hurry to do so...wonderfully written piece, and enjoyed very very much. Keep yo head up. ~Carly |
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