Teen Poetry #3 |
A rose with a thorn |
jytree Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 336omaha ark usa |
Here I am, Look at me now, If you look closely enough, I might make you say wow, For I was once a rose, With my friend in the master's little grove, Little by little I started to grow, And to look at me now it really shows, On certain day I started to bloom, But I finally notice I had a thorn in me, So slowly I dided, For it was my doom, But a funny thing hapened, Yes indeed, See I have very strong roots, So my death as a rose was me just breaking free, Ah yes my roots you see, I branched out to make myself free, So now hereI am as happy as can be, Why you ask,? Because NOw I live as a tree. Love is pure in it's top form, But with out romance love is not born |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
"Here I am, Look at me now, If you look closely enough, I might make you say wow, For I was once a rose," I like how you started this poem a lot, and the whole thing is really good, nice job "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I'll have to agree with everything lake said. i liked the same exact lines too. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Dazed_and_Confused Junior Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 15 |
Totally love it! the rose is so delecate and a good subject to use in a poem. Keep writin'! |
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