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Dopey Dope
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0 posted 2000-12-07 07:48 PM


NOTE: blah


Love's Balance:


There you are starring the moon down.
Magnifying your own existance.
Trying to make everything back away,
And smirking at a job well done.

Here I am bleeding to life.
Simplifying my very self being.
Wondering if i'll ever make it,
And crying at another missed chance.

Together we make the perfect couple.
Balancing each other out completely.
Knowing that without one the other is not whole,
And kissing with the sense of eternity.





I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


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Lakewalker
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1 posted 2000-12-07 08:58 PM


"Here I am bleeding to life."

Ahhhhhh!!!!!!!, your words are attacking my mind, filling it with thoughts, and other odd stuff.  Why the blah?  Huh?  I thought it was good.  And congrats on 2000 posts!

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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IsGona
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2 posted 2000-12-07 09:50 PM


Oposites attract... That's what they say anyhow.  Maybe you just explained why.  keep 'em coming.
IsGona

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I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
~Hatebreed~

Hallie_Angel
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3 posted 2000-12-07 11:12 PM


Good Poem! Thank you again for helping me Dopey!
Kit McCallum
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4 posted 2000-12-08 07:33 AM


"Here I am bleeding to life.
Simplifying my very self being."

"Knowing that without one the other is not whole,
And kissing with the sense of eternity."

No "blah" here at all Javier ... wonderful expression in this emotion-filled piece, great description!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

jytree
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5 posted 2000-12-08 01:11 PM



j/k amigo
I thought you poem was   <---

Love is pure in it's top form,
But with out romance love is not born


jytree
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6 posted 2000-12-08 01:13 PM



j/k amigo
I thought you poem was   <---

Love is pure in it's top form,
But with out romance love is not born


CocoBaci
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7 posted 2000-12-08 01:59 PM


Trying to make everything back away...

Wondering if i'll ever make it...

And kissing with the sense of eternity...
============================================


DD, I enjoyed this...

From the struggle of heartache and the kiss of romantic bliss you have me smiling at this splendid write of your's...

coco


Dopey Dope
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8 posted 2000-12-08 10:42 PM


Wow, odd enough you all replied and liked it. I don't, but i guess thats besides the point. Thanks to all of you!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


Ina
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9 posted 2000-12-08 10:43 PM


its great,definatly not a "blah"..well what do I know..
Regina

Elizabeth
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10 posted 2000-12-08 11:25 PM


Any expression of emotion is NOT blah!

(Well, OK, maybe some are. But this wasn't one of them!   )

[This message has been edited by Elizabeth (edited 12-08-2000).]

branden726
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11 posted 2000-12-09 09:21 AM


Well i see you have a few poem and well you reply to mine so im returning the favor.....good writting here i really liked it a lot and well i would like to say keep up the good writting but what i really want to say is NEVER stop the great writting!
                 ~BrandenBear~

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Fearless_Angel
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12 posted 2000-12-09 07:06 PM


Hey Dopey_Dope:
    Well, I havne't been on for a while, but I've obviously missed a lot of good work from you. That was a very good poem. Keep up the good work and well hope to talk to you soon aiight? Wellz, gots to bounce now, Buh bye!
Lotsa Love,
Angel
xoxoxo
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silvrduck
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13 posted 2000-12-09 10:22 PM


definately not a "blah" piece! this was great, you amaze me every time...

with the unknown comes no expectations
in this i find my peace

love is friendship set on fire... now, if only it were free to ignite...

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