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Snowflakes (And life) |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden 
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Snowflakes, falling down into your hair, white balls of fluff, falling everywhere. Snowflakes, fall around us, me and you, in each other's arms, me and you. Snowflakes, keep me warm will you? Just keep me in your arms, that's all you have to do. Snowflakes, I love the snow, because I'm with you, and I love that, ya know? Snowflakes, just stay with me, warm in your arms, that's where I want to be. ---------------------------------------------------- Clue: this ain't about Justin. I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be great, to put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Allysa: From the pieces that I have read from you, they are filled with so much emotion. This is no exception. It is beautifully written. Good job. ~AF~ "Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement." Christopher Fry |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
Agreed, this is a very beautiful piece. One whose situation I must say I am rather envous of. "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \ I am lost in my own mind. |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a beautiful piece, my friend. It's amazing where we can draw our inspiration, isn't it? Snowflakes are beautiful, and you have shown us a different side than what we usually think of when the snow falls. Thanks for sharing. "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
thanks ya all! I thought this was something different, something special, (someone special) oh well, life's never the way I think it'll be! I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be great, to put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought this poem was great!! I really liked the flow and the whole style of the poem. Great job on this one!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
It's actually snowing so hard outside of my house right now, I hope school gets cancelled for tomorrow  ! This poem is written very well, I like how it's done. Nice job "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
It's not snowing that hard, but atleast the little bit we're getting is here! Push some snow our way!!! East!! LOL~!!! Anyways, thanks you guys~ I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be great, to put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad. |
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Hallie_Angel Member
since 2000-12-06
Posts 102 |
Allysa, Help! Tell me how I poat a poem! |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Gee, Catherine, thanks, but I think you've figured that one out by now. I hope you like this though, do you understand it??? I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be great, to put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I love the poem, BUT.....yes BUT...i all confused now. Seems like you have so many special someones in your life. Maybe i need a better explanation of the situation. I love the poem though  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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