Teen Poetry #3 |
A loved lost |
jytree Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 336omaha ark usa |
Here we are my deariest friends, Once again i'm at the end, Why should I have to love so much, When it feels like being ran over with a truck, I'm talking full size semi!!! Love or lust is a game in my head, Where I can love the girl purely, Or just take her to bed. I am just glad to say I have some control which is really good compaired to some men. Laugh if you want, Try and succed, Of makeing fun of a 6-10 21 year old virgian, I all can say is you won't succed so nan nan I have lost my flame that was dear to me, So now all I can ask is that would you shed a tear with me. : [ : My lady left saying to me "Get a job, get a life, Stop this nonsense dream. Well I look at her right in the eye, But when I when to say something my brain went dry So all I can ask out of you, Please treat me right don't leave me blue, I didn't know I be in so much trouble, Still laughning from the pick-up line I used, I am going to burst, Oh ya the line was, If you were a bugger I'd pick you first Love is pure in it's top form, But with out romance love is not born |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
This was great. I laughed, I cried... The part bout the truck rocked!! Lol, the ending did too. Heck, the whole thing rocked. ~Carly< !signature--> So pardon me while I burst into flames...I've had enough of the world and it's people's mindless games. [This message has been edited by Child of the Stars (edited 12-04-2000).] |
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Dean Member
since 1999-11-23
Posts 120Canada |
I like you style! Sounds so good when you read it aloud. Keep up the good work! "Live to love or why live at all" Deano :) |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
jytree good job on the expression on this one. i could feel the pain of a love's lost. I do hope that luck flows your way. Keep posting!! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
This is great~ Just bumpin' this up so more ppl can read about this!~ I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be great, to put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad. |
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chic Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 245yellville, Ar, U.S. |
While I was laughing I started crying and then at the end I just broke out in laughter! Great poem Jay and you do a good job of expressing your feelings. Love, Barb "Life is a game and we have to play, but in the end...we all die."-by me! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I also think you did a really good job of expressing this, it's great "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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jytree Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 336omaha ark usa |
To tell the truth I was really scared to put this one on because I was really out there when I wrote this one but I am glad you like it. Love is pure in it's top form, But with out romance love is not born |
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