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Free as A Bird... |
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FlipAngel Junior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 46Prior Lake, MN, USA |
This poem is yet unfinished...but perhaps that is what its meant to be...endless, boundless. May I be steady as the sun despite all doubts, all fears of the world the sun is constant, promising to awake us in the morning and wish us sweet dreams through the night. May I be wise as the owl always replenishing a constant thirst for knowledge abd may I, like he, always be curious about life and its wonders May I be swift as the cougar sprinting through the nature wild never looking back, trusting his instincts in defense to defeat the obstables that lie ahead, and in confidence in reaching the glory of his goal May I be free as the bird soaring through the open sky bound to no limits setting its own course letting her wings take her to wherever she so desires... ~*Yesterday is gone, let go of the past; tommorrow will bring new hope to grasp*~ |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
I really don't know what to say. This was....I don't even know. Well I could say it's good. I could say it's well written, I could say it flowed perfectly. But I won't. I'll just say that I fell in love with this. ~Carly |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Good Well Written Flowed perfectly....... see i say it even though child of the stars won't....what a lazy butt hehe. ANyway I agree with her though, this poem is so wonderful it'd be hard to explain with words. I like how you expressed every stanza into it's own little desire of yours. Great poem!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Great, very great! Hehehe I liked this, it was very unique, great job.  xoxo Jenn "A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces." |
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FlipAngel Junior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 46Prior Lake, MN, USA |
Thank you for for your comments! Yes, this poem is hard to explain in words. Its message is more understood by the soul, not by words. I feel that, for human beings to co-exist harmoniously, intertwined with the world, we must love, respect, and learn from our fellow animals. We all share one special,common bond: we were all given a wonderful gift...the gift of life. ~*Yesterday is gone, let go of the past; tommorrow will bring new hope to grasp*~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Ditto to the others, this is fantastic. I'm amazed, I really love it. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
this is really good...please tell me when you decide to finish it..i'd love to read it all over again. my suggestion to end this is something like this: "may i be my true self without all the lies and masks etc etc etc..." you know what i mean.....it's always better to be yourself  thanks for the readI see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
EXCELLENT... loved it!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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