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I Will Forever Hate You
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I Will Forever Hate You |
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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
Well Dopey, this is for you. You complained I don't write in different styles, so here is a new style for me. ;.p It sucks, I apologize. Vreni I Will Forever Hate You A ghostly figure, phantom mirage am I, A fleeting thought, a passing sigh. I purloin control, disintegrate your Will, My puppet of innocence you are still. Your tears collected in the wells of Forever, The threads of your life broken and severed. The scissors of Lies cut their patterns of Hate, Demons of past pull you down with their weight. The memory of love rests in the fiber of You, Your twisted pain it inflates, fails to subdue. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey. This just sucked me into its words...so good so good. The style was kickin' too. ~Carly Home is where the heart goes when it needs a band-aid. |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
This one was definately good. I thought your style and choice of words were realy cool Jon |
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Dean Member
since 1999-11-23
Posts 120Canada |
Good peom!! I like your style! Please keep up the good work and I will continue to check up on your work. "Live to love or why live at all" Deano :) |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
This was good. I think you met dopey's lil' challenge. Your word selction was amazing. Keep it up. IsGona "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This new style really suits you. I love how this one flows. It's very beautifully written, just like the rest of your poems. Keep up the great work! "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I think you did a good job on this  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
I don't think I read dopey's name on this reply list...? Tisk tisk... he didn't even reply!! Well, I'm sure that he will, he's pretty good about replying to everything. This is a very gripping peice, it definitly sucks you in while reading, kudos! xoxo Jenn "Guess I'm not smart, I let you un-nerve me, I let you control me; afraid the truth would hurt me, when it's you that hurts me more." TLC |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
*pops into the room with a spot light on him* have no fear, dopey is here! Yes yes i am replying!!!! mwhaha! Vreni, amazing.....simply amazing! The new style is wonderful and I love it. I am very proud of you. I clicked on the title to get into the poem and as it was loading i expected the regular poem. No breaks between stanza's, regular ryhme scheme, bla bla bla but nonetheless GREAT poems as usual and stuff. This, however, topped it for me. The style is great and I am proud of you doing this for lil' ol me. Mua mua!!! Love you tons vreni, keep it up! *with a british accent* smashing! *sips his tea*  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
Thanks to all who replied to this horrid little piece. Dopey - lol, glad you liked it, and um, I don't think it merits any sort of pride though. lol. Well, do I get an email now or something now that I've met your challenge? ;.P J/k. Vreni |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
this is sooo good it so did not suck!! looking forward to more of your stuff |
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