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Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

0 posted 2000-11-29 08:27 AM

if I close my eyes,
I can see your smile.
You say I need to forget,
but that will take a while.
if I listen hard I hear,
every word you told me.
I don't know if you ment it,
I just want it to be.
if I open my heart,
I could love again.
But that's up to you,
up to you my friend.
If I try to get you back,
I will be happy with myself,
not sad or angry,
like I've always felt.
If i just open my heart,
and let words come inside,
I can take off the mask,
and no longer have to hide.
If i tried just a little harder,
if I listened just a little more,
if my thoughts actually mattered,
I don't think I would be torn.
If I tried to see things differently,
if you cared to help me through,
then I wouldn't need anything but you.

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Hmmmmmmm. I was singing this while I wrote this, I think I sent the world's longest e mail last night, just want to know what you think about it. Also, it's for Justin, of course.
Allysa

I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be gray, put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad.

Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

1 posted 2000-11-29 04:50 PM

Is anybody going to write back??? This can't be that bad, can it???

I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be gray, put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad.

IsGona
Senior Member

since 2000-07-14

Posts 723

2 posted 2000-11-29 05:04 PM

This is very expresive of your feelings and thaughts. To open your heart seems like such a risk. But with the love and support of your man it would be so easy and the benifits would be so great. I liked it
IsGona

"Every body has their destiny...
I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
~Hatebreed~

Dean
Member

since 1999-11-23

Posts 120
Canada

3 posted 2000-11-29 09:24 PM

First I want say Hello Allysa! I like then name Allysa. I really liked your poem it was really good, strong emotion, good choice of words, it was a all together good poem I really liked so I added you to my poet library. Anyways Allysa keep up the good work alright!

Yours Truely
Dean

"Live to love or why live at all"
Deano :)

Greeneyes617
Member

since 2000-11-22

Posts 329
Arkansas

4 posted 2000-11-30 12:18 PM

I like this. I know how this feels. Great expression of your feelings.

Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

5 posted 2000-11-30 08:07 AM

Thanks you guys, I'm glad you like this!!! Well, gotta go, I have so much to do.

I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be gray, put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad.

TearsOfPearls
Member

since 1999-09-23

Posts 322
Vereeniging, South-Africa

6 posted 2000-11-30 01:58 PM

Very well written, and very expressing. Keep it up.

Planning big can be a gamble...I have already rolled the dice!

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

7 posted 2000-11-30 03:40 PM

I think this is written very well, the flow of it is excellent and the thoughts are well organized. Nice job

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
http://www.thehungersite.com

Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

8 posted 2000-11-30 04:14 PM

Thanks!

I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be great, to put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

9 posted 2000-11-30 07:15 PM

It's kinda funny seeing lake talk to you cuz your icons are completely the opposite. He's like little mr. angel boy and you're devil woman. OOOOOOOOOOOooooooooo I hear opposites attract!! hehe...Love connection Love connection! Ring a ding ding ding!
Ok no.....im lame.

Anyway this was a great poem as usual. Keep posting!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

10 posted 2000-12-05 08:03 AM

Dopey, you crack me up!!! Which is good, because i need to laugh more, and not be so depressed as to I get smacked when that happens, n e wayz. I haven't been around for a while.
Been hanging at the Eminem part of the fanfiction page of www.bored.com
Well, thanks, you crack me up! I love yoooou!

I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be great, to put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad.

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

11 posted 2000-12-27 09:38 AM

hey Allysa - that was so funny...u know replying first on your own poem

no one should do that. our fault and i apologize. secondly, you know this poem is one of the sweetest poems i've read. If i was nitsuj and you read me this poem, i'd hold you in my arms forever

...and i'm not saying that just to be nice. Thanks for the heart warming read

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

12 posted 2000-12-27 03:23 PM

Ha, I just read that Dopey. And I am "mr. angel boy"

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
http://www.thehungersite.com

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