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sweetypie5 Member
since 2000-10-06
Posts 97MWC,OK,USA |
(Okay I haven't written here in a while soooo pleeze don't be harsh critics!) I thought you really cared But then you proved me wrong You really didn't do anything It's just you were never there You couldn't wipe away my tears And you never can Because you are the one who caused them I can no longer taste your sweet lips Or feel your loving hands I can't see the smile on your face When you see me You will never hear the words again that we both cherish so much They just arn't true anymore Because you stopped coming around And how it hurt so much But you will never know my pain Because you don't feel it I don't care anymore though It's your turn to feel the way I did But you shall never feel the intensity of my pain Nor I will I feel yours But I don't care because our time has passed And we shall never met again. When boys are four they will give you thier gum, but when they are forteen they won't even give you the time of day... |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
It always hurts to end a relationship, but this person obviously didn't deserve you. I'm glad that you are moving on. You describe you feelings really well in this piece. Keep up the good work! "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
That was really good. I totally understand what you are going through. Just know I will always be here for you. And he really doesn't deserve you Steph!!! Great poem, keep writing!!! Much Luv, Priscilla ~*~GoOd fRiEnDz ArE hArD 2 FiNd, HaRdEr 2 LeAvE, & iMpOsSiBlE 2 fOrGeT~*~tHe HaRdEsT tHiNg tO Do iS wAtCh tHe 1 U LuV, lUv sUm1 eLsE~*~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
"But you will never know my pain Because you don't feel it" You did a good job expressing your feelings in this one, I think the words above are so true. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Having a relationship end is such a hard thing to go through...it takes time but you always end up ok...remember if its not ok, its not the end. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I feel the intensity of the pain in this one. great way of expression. No need to worry if we'd be harsh critics......often the harshest critic of someones poetry is ones self.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
It's hard for me to see my fellow poets in passions go thru all these hard times  This poem depicts well all the frustration and hurt you're going thru. You really put your heart out into this. thanks for sharingI see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
Sorry hun but guess what. Those lips never were sweet, those hands were never loving. If someone hurts you, well then you realize it was either a game or a mistake. You see if those lips were sweet and those and were loving you'd still be with him. Branden |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
hey!! I am replying to your poem again!!! Well I am happy that you are no longer with that jerk, because he didn't deserve you anyway!!! You are a much better person than that!!! Keep your head up, you'll meet mr. right sooner or later!!! Luv Always, Priscilla [This message has been edited by sweetstuff101 (edited 12-24-2000).] |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Great poem, it is hard to go through this and even harder to watch someone else go through it too... We all know how you feel and know how hard it is!! Keep up the great work and remember him for the fun you had!! Melz!!  Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Good work!!! Get all your pain out and then in the future there will be no more feelings. Moving on is the biggest step you could take. Good for you!!! People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
the pain and fustration will slowly fade but always will remin. a boy or man whatever u want to call him did u wrong. the poem was nice. how could i be a harsh critic?lol Regina ps I adored the quote, its so true |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Losing a person this way is really hard but they are the bad ones, the ass#$*%s, if you know what I mean. In time all pain fades, but one day they will get what is coming to them. What goes around comes around. Great poem. Jon |
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