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Strong as Steel
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Strong as Steel |
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Ender Member
since 1999-12-08
Posts 200Yuma, AZ USA 
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Strong, I feel My heart of steel Love, I keep Never to seep Together, with you Happiness shoots through My day, always great Never left at the gate Feelings, yours and mine Is it all a sign? So much, we share Love and care Without you, what to do Could I make it through Complete, you make me feel My heart, my soul, strong as steel *Blonde people are normal. Everyone else is just strange. -Ender* |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey. This was really great! I love the whole concept of having a heart of steel..stupenderific, simply stupenderific... ~Carly Home is where the heart goes when it needs a band-aid. |
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sweetypie5 Member
since 2000-10-06
Posts 97MWC,OK,USA |
Hmmm...it was a great poem and I love the concept of a heart of steel...good job. When boys are four they will give you thier gum, but when they are forteen they won't even give you the time of day... |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I love the style you used, with the commas and everything, yeah, it's great. Your poem is very good, it seems to express your feelings really well. Nicely done  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
It's always great to have someone who makes you feel this strong. You describe it well. Thanks for posting! "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Its an awesome thing that this person makes you feel this way!! Excellent poem  )~ |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
I really love the way this poem is written. I love that style. The message was strong here too. good job IsGona "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
The syle is nice......keep it up. The message of this poem was great. I really liked it. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Ender Member
since 1999-12-08
Posts 200Yuma, AZ USA |
Thanx everyone. I guess that i am trying to make what you could call a series...so wish me luck *Blonde people are normal. Everyone else is just strange. -Ender* |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
WOW! You are one of many out there who can write like nothing. I mean you write with so much emotion and strenght at the same time and it cant get no better then this and i must say this is way better then any of mine and i think you should share this with whoever you wrote it to!!!!!! ~Branden~ "i just love when you bring your whole crew because its just a bigger piece of cake for me to chew threw" |
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