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kimmy Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 98 |
Drifitng silently into oblivion, Undetected by anyone close, Into an endless pit of depression, Undetected by most. Flying from level to level, Soaring from low to high, Through endless black clouds, Arriving; hoping not to survive, Passing by horrid memories, Of happiness never to be felt, Gliding through unopened doors, When touched will melt. Alone at last the tears fall, In streams down careless cheeks, Uncaring of the pain they cause, Emotionless of the feelings seeked. Weakness amuse those of strength, Treasured by those of power, Invisible to the hierarchy, Making the meek cower. Darkened corners grow darker, Light fades away to grey, Useless to anyone around, Needless for you to stay. Falling from the sunshine, Failing to wear a parachute, Throat closes to ignore the scream, Only trying to stay mute. Collapsing at the rocky bottom, Loneliness encompasses the heart, Surounded by the emptiness, Slowly happiness always comes apart. Understanding the nothingness, Forever this way it will be, The person hurts who feels this, That solitary person is me. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Okay, wow. Wow. This was very, very well written and it made me cry...I know how you feel...This is so like many poems I wrote that I never shared with anyone, cuz they scared me so much...well I wish you luck in finding happiness... ~Carly |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
I'm left speachless...this is written in a fantastic way, you sure use your talent in a wonderful way. This poem is...is...wow!...man...so much feeling, emotion in it, very touching actually. Great job, keep it up...  |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I think this was expressed very well, you did a great job with it "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hey you're going through some hellish times eh? Well im here if ya need an ear! Anyway great poem!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
wow!!! this is really very well written. But right now, i'm more worried about you than your poem. I know this rely of mine is not really in time, but i hope you are doing much better now. good luck I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
this is such an amazing poem i cant even begin to tell you...nor can i begin to tell you exactly how much i understand how your feelings...been there and have arrived at that place yet again...it's horrible yet comforting at the same time...when you leave it then come back to it it's almost like an old friend...its very strange...i hope things are better for you now tho...xoxo |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
It's amazing how we can get our feelings out with poetry and not with other writing. That is an awesome poem, and like other people have said, when you get to that place more than once, it's like an old friend. Keep writing, that's all I can say. Love always,  ~*Skyfire *~Always Canadian*~ ~*~I used to be an idiot, but I'm all right now~*~ |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
through life's trials and tribulations, we always manage to spit out great peices of poetry. great job *dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Tears of Glass Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 182Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure |
*Click* I'm adding you to my library! Awesome poem. You are very talented! Keep em coming... *Jennifer |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Well, there isn't too much I can say that would elevate the greatness expressed through your words. This is very sad, but they are all too true. I can relate wholeheartedly, I hope it gets better for you. xoxo Jenn "A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ?? |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nice one here. i read it again and i liked it even more. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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