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Greeneyes617 Member
since 2000-11-22
Posts 329Arkansas 
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Looking up at the midnight sky, I feel as though I began to fly, Across the mountians and trees up high, Gliding free throughout the sky, Looking below at magical things untold, Never knowning what the future holds, Enjoying the wind on my face, Thankful of God's enteral grace, Of his love so true so dear, Death I will not fear, For I will be in haven when my time comes, But for now a servent I will be, A servent's heart I will need, Willing and ready, Forgiving and kind, Telling those I meet of God's love devine, Of the grace and love from above, Of his son who died that we might be "clean", As white as snow, Cleansed by the blood that stained the cross so, How underserving we are. I wrote this last night. It might not make much sense. Lets just say these are "my thoughts and my feelings." If any of you have an idea for a title please let me know.  |
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Jenabou Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 215Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA |
this poem was amazing! i love it its so pure and uplifting as for a title what about "God's Grace" ?!?! i dunno!! keep writing! Love Ya Bunches ~Jen~  The world is like a mirror; frown at it, and it frowns at you. Smile and it smiles, too Be kind,for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
Wow...I really admire how you expressed something as personal as your faith so openly in this piece. Very well done. I gained a lot of respect for you by reading this. Great job. As for a title...maybe "eternal grace" or "beginning to fly"...? I dunno, I'm terrible with titles! Keep writing ~Kristin ~*Won't you come and hold my hand? This world has taken me as far as it can... without your smile.~* ~*If I never said I'm sorry, then I'm wrong, |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
This is an extremely good poem, and I like Jenabou's idea for a title. God's Grace would fit prefectly for it. It is nice to read a poem such as this, great work! Jon |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I think you did an excellent job of telling your "thoughts and... feelings" in this poem, it's really good  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey. You know what word I love? Ponder. Ponder ponder ponder. That would be a crazy title..heh heh..well I really loved this, it's goin in my library... ~Carly Home is where the heart goes when it needs a band-aid. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Okay okay, shows how blond I am today. I didn't put it there. |
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jytree Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 336omaha ark usa |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
this was great. I liked this very much!! I hope you keep on posting!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
These are some great thoughts, my friend. It's good to know that He died for us! I'm not good with titles, but how about "midnight thoughts"? "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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