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Jenabou Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 215Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA 
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They say the stars that shine will burn for eternity But i don't believe it.you've proven its wrong to me Cos you were my star for so long shining down and helping me along But my life is dark now all in the blink of an eye no more star to shine on me now your gone Im feeling so low and im running on empty where did you go? Its hard to go on without you by my side But ill always hold you deep down inside So maybe what they say is right your stars do shine forever they just arent always as bright. The world is like a mirror; frown at it, and it frowns at you. Smile and it smiles, too Be kind,for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Jenabou~ This is amazing!!!I love it...You are sending out a good message or statement...I like it too...Thanks for sharing this piece with us...Keep up the good work!!!I hope to see you post more... People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts. |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
Wow! This was an awesome post. I'm so glad I read this...the whole thing was amazing and the ending was very powerful. Great job...keep writing. Kris ~*Won't you come and hold my hand? This world has taken me as far as it can... without your smile.~* ~*If I never said I'm sorry, then I'm wrong, |
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Jenabou Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 215Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA |
thank you both very much life is tuff you jsut gotta make the most of what it tosses yer way thanks for the replies The world is like a mirror; frown at it, and it frowns at you. Smile and it smiles, too Be kind,for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
Aww this is really cute! I especially like this line "So maybe what they say is right/ your stars do shine forever they just arent always as bright." Keep it up! [This message has been edited by Suga_Baby (edited 11-27-2000).] |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
It's never easy to have to let go of your "star", is it? I'm sure another star will come your way soon, just keep your telescope in focus!  Thanks for sharing."Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I think you did a great job on this one, it has some really good thoughts in it. I also liked the ending, nice job "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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CareBear3 Junior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 39New Hampshire |
Its funny one of my favorite quotes is "When you love someone, All your saved-up wishes start coming out" Youre poem reminded me of that. This was a beautiful piece, and I think the ending shows a lot of thought and also time away. Did you write this about recent history or distant history? That kind of recognition that things are not as bad as they seemed shows a lot of courage. This was great, Id love to read more. "In great moments life seems neither right nor wrong but something greater it seems inevitable" ~Kelley |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I really like the message in this one. I especially liked the last two lines. Keep it up!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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