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BaByGuRL
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since 2000-11-25
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0 posted 2000-11-26 12:50 PM



there she sits
alone in a cold dark corner-
awaiting someone to come and save her from her misery
there she sits
i wish i could tell her it would be over soon...but i cannot tell a lie
there she sits- thinking that he might return
but she has been there for too long a time that she has long since lost her faith
there she sits as the hope drains from her soul
there she sits-
and just as she is about to give up close her eyes, she sees something
she sees her reflection
and she realizes what has always been there...
so she she stands up and sees the strenght that has been burried deep within her heart all along

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Dopey Dope
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1 posted 2000-11-26 12:53 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!!

This was a wonderful first post. The positivity in this one is outstanding. I loved it........

dont mind me but for some reason "there she sits" makes me think of "thar she blows"

.....anyway the poem rocked!
Post more!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


Kandi
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since 2000-06-14
Posts 354
North of Hell
2 posted 2000-11-26 12:54 PM


AAHHHHHH!!!!! Welcome to Passions!!! (yay I said it first!)
Hun don't ever tell me u can't write poetry! This was AWESOME! I love it! I really needed to read something uplifting tonight...I was talking to our brother and I started crying so bad (i'm a baby!) and this poem just puts me in such a better mood so thank you!
So glad your a member here now! U know I love you  
Ur lil sista
~K~
PS - this couldnt be about anyone in particualr...could it???? lol  


~*Things you see the way you see them will never be seen again*~

~Won't you come and hold my hand?
This world has taken me as far as it can...
w

Kandi
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3 posted 2000-11-26 12:56 PM


NOOOO darn dopey!!! he musta replied a second b4 me NOOOOO!  (
lol oh well...nothing personal dope...u know I still love u

~*Things you see the way you see them will never be seen again*~

~Won't you come and hold my hand?
This world has taken me as far as it can...
w

Dopey Dope
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4 posted 2000-11-26 01:04 AM


hahahahahahaha suckerrrrrrrrrrrrrr!!!!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


LoveBug
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5 posted 2000-11-26 03:13 PM


Welcome to Passions. This is a wonderful first post. If we all realized how much strength we had inside of us, we would be better off. Thanks for sharing

PS-check your e-mail

"Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather
"Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav



Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
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6 posted 2000-11-26 03:13 PM


Welcome to Passions
Nice job on your first post here, I hope you enjoy it here at passions

And, kandi and dopey, you guys are funny   



"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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Dopey Dope
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7 posted 2000-11-26 04:23 PM


Once again great poem!

And lake....correction...*I* am funny



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


xShUgArHiGhx
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tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs
8 posted 2000-11-27 03:46 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!

Excellent first post...i thought that was really good!! I cant wait to see more =o) Welcome!!

Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
9 posted 2000-11-27 03:54 PM


I have read 2 poems by you and I have been so amazed. I hope that you do share more with us...Im looking forward to reading more of your work!!!

People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts.

Acies
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10 posted 2000-11-27 05:02 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!

It really doesn't matter to me if i'm first to reply cause i believe in really reading the poem first and trying to understand it before i reply.  Just kidding guys(Dopes and Kands)  

Your first post has amazed me already.  We got another talented one in here.  Not only that, I love the positive ending to your poem.  We need this once in a while here in Passions.  Thanks for sharing.  Welcome to your e-family  


I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


keoni
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since 2000-10-16
Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC
11 posted 2000-11-27 05:19 PM


This is a great first poem. It message is so real. I loved it. I hope to see more. Welcome!            
                                     Jon

BaByGuRL
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since 2000-11-25
Posts 13

12 posted 2000-11-27 07:00 PM


I just wanna say thanx to all of you who took the time to read and respond to my poem. I have been reading all of your poems and you all have such great talent. Thanx again
~BaByGuRL

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