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The Birth of My Future
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The Birth of My Future |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723
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The Birth of My Future... My friends are pathetic My life is too The girl I love Lives in timbuck- too oh did I mention... she has a boyfriend this seems too familiar... an unwelcomed trend but on with my life end what is now past make a new begining start living... at last "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN" ~Hatebreed~ |
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Lucius Cade Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 235Saskatchewan |
Hey, I loved the way you wrote this soo much. I can never seem to put such meaning in so little words, I always ramble....this was beautiful.  Lucidity is the answer to all problems |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Lucius Cade, Thank you. Your too kind. I don't recall reading many of your poems I will keep an eye for your posts. IsGona "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN" ~Hatebreed~ |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
"but on with my life end what is now past make a new begining start living... at last" Wow! I really liked this piece. I'm glad that you've decided to take control and start living your life. Keep up the great work! False gems may shine as brightly as the genuine article, but there are always those who can tell the difference. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
This style was kickin!! I loved it. I really loved it. Super job, and good luck with that future. ~Carly A word is dead When it is said Some say, I say it just Begins to live That day. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
IsGona- This is VERY well-done. I really enjoyed it, and especially love the positive ending. Write On!!! Take care, -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Thank you to every one that read this poem. I'm glad some of you liked it (or were at least nice enough to fake it  )thax IsGona "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN" ~Hatebreed~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I liked the positive ending of this as well, it was a really good poem "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
WOW I loved this, it's great!! Mind if I print this out? Really it's GREAT keep it up!! Smile  Bel |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
LAkewalker ~ I'm glad you liked the ending. I'm makeing a concious effort to be optimistic lately Bel ~ I so happy that you liked it. Of course u can print it out if you so desire. IsGona "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
IsGona, i think that being consciously positive is a great way to get out of depression. I have done it and it worked with flying colors. Anyway, i'll also have to comment on the style.......i liked it a lot. I think it added a lot to it. It propelled me to keep on reading.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Different style and still a good poem. Thanks for sharing this. keep it up I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Thank you both I apreciate your comments Dopey ~ I agree. I worte this poem several years ago and was a little depressed. I woke up one day and said "I won't be depressed anymore"... it worked. happieness all depends on your out look on life. any how thanks. acire ~ thanks. I'm glad you liked the style. I kinda borrowed it from a poem a read long long ago and I liked it just because it's different. "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
I have to admit, I laughed when I read the line about timbucktoo(sp???). It just struck me as funny...no offense! Other than that, though, I really liked the message in your closing...life always brings hard times, but all you can do is keep living and going on or else you're dead anyway. You made that point very clearly to me. Thanks for posting this, it was great! Love~ K ~*Won't you come and hold my hand? This world has taken me as far as it can... without your smile.~* ~*If I never said I'm sorry, then I'm wrong, |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
lol it's cool. I can laugh at this now. I't;s kinda ironic, but I'm actually dateing the girl from Timbuktu... she lives much closer and I still love her. Oh and it was spelled incorrectly it's Timbuktu. anyways, thanks for replying "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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