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I lost it somehow
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I lost it somehow |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
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My soul is empty No tears to cry now I never posessed it But I lost it somehow He entered so fast And left the same way No tears to cry now My soul died today I just loved to see him Such a wonderful sight! And now he's gone forever My soul died tonight Memories I still possess But those, I know, will fade And now, my soul is dead tonight In a tomb I should be laid I never got a hug from him A kind look, or a kiss But I've lost the illusion now Just seeing him was bliss My soul is empty No tears to cry now I never possessed it But I lost it somehow "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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Jenabou Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 215Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA |
this is a fantastic poem very deep and moving. never let go of the memories babe especialy if they are all you have  |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
Have you ever heard someone say, "There's just too many pictures of things that have happened in my life!"...of course not...besides memories, pictures are all we have to keep the days of ou lives alive. Memories are the pictures that we always have with us. Even though, it was something that never became real, it meant something to you and thats all that matters. Keep the pictures around. I really like the way you repeated certain lines to create the meloncholy. nice job. Jeremy D. Halstead |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
Wow. I really like this poem. It hits home really hard, ya know? cuz I think we all know what it's like to have something so beautiful for a short time and then have it be taken away. You're really good! Keep writing. Much love ~ Kris/Kandi :] ~*All that I have found in reason is reason just to not believe *~ ~*Things you see the way you see them will never be seen again*~ |
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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
Dearest Lovebug, hold your head up high, Please don't despair, don't sit and sigh! And if heart's affections are truly stuck, (Girls are often privy to such fine luck) Though shared love you never possessed, Cherish those memories with tenderness! But a little advice I may now pass on, (My constant input can be counted upon) Aye, if this unnoticing fool is as he seems, You're better off awakened from your dream! |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Thank you all for your sweet replies. They mean so much to me! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Such sadness LoveBug..it is indeed hard to lose something, even if you never really had it..losing the dream can be very hard. Excellent, soul filled piece my moderator friend! *Krista Knutson* "Cherish your vision; Cherish your ideals; Cherish the music that stirs in your heart, the beauty that forms in your mind, the loveliness that drapes your purest thoughts. If you remain true to them, your world will at last be built." ~James Allen~ "We've made houses for hatred...it's time we made a place where people's souls may be seen and made safe"...~Jewel~ |
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Crystalina123 Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 228 |
Lovebug, I like this poem alot. You write well. Good piece. Crystal Maybe God has us meet a few wrong people so that when we meet the right one we can truly appreciate the gift. |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
That was beautiful. I know how much it hurts, I hope it gets better. I wanted to vote for this one but it's not flagged. I think it belongs in the book . Great Job~Susie "If we could read the secret history of our enemies, we should find in each man's life sorrow and suffering enough to disarm all hostility." ~Henry W |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
it hurts when you lose someone close to you but give it time and miracles will happen. when i was going through a tough time in my life i had no one to turn to. but god sent me and angel. someone that for the rest of my life i will cherish and love. your poem brought back memories and i really like it. i give you props for all of your writing it is beautiful!!!!!! but you know what you should never forget the past no matter how much it fun it was or how much it hurt. its what keeps your memories alive. |
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Angela16 Junior Member
since 1999-11-19
Posts 37USA |
I really like this poem. It was worded nicely. And I can totally relate to it! Angela |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
My dearwst LoveBug~ I absolutely love this poem! It is sad, and I know how you feel, but keep your chin up, it will always work out. I love your work! It's fascinating. Love Always~*~Jessica~*~  "Love is the product of our discontentment with ourselves." "Bleeding hearts release tears of fire" "work like you don't need money, love like you've never been hurt,and live everyday as if it's your last" "Shoot for the moon, if you shall fall short, you always have the stars to fall upon" |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Jessica, very thought-provoking piece here...should we let go of the good times we had when a relationship fails?hmmm.... In MHO,dont let go....though the thought of the failed relationship may hurt, still you two had some good times together and these moments of bliss helped DEFINE who you are today...dont lose them as they serve as a bridge between our past selves and our present selves hope i am making some sense...LOL |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
this says so much about life and people. thanks for your words on this very page this is great work and it helped hide my rage. I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul |
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Acies
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since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I love the repetitions. It made the poem more powerfull. thanks for sharing it. Loosing someone is very hard to accept. I just lost someone too. Though I'm doing better now, I still hold on to the memories and to the thought that one day we'd be back together. And that makes it harder for me to go thru a day. Stay strong as I have. Though times you'd feel week, like i did, don't do anything stupid. good luck |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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