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-=Drowning In Your Arms=-
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA 
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-=Drowning In Your Arms=- I hate this hold you have on my heart, you've memorized all my weaknesses. You know I act independent and strong, but on the inside im filled with insecurities. I hate how you know i cant hate you, no matter what you do to me. Heck I hate myself for that fact, I wish I could just get over you and live my life happily. I hate how I'm doing great, and you're out of my thoughts completely. Then I see you and you flash that smile, you really shouldn't do that to me. I hate how you control me and my emotions, I fell to fast, now i'm struggling to get up... I feel like i'm drowning, and no matter what i do. I keep falling back into the water, back into the arms of you. "A true friend can see the truth and pain in your eyes, even when you're fooling everyone else" |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
It's always hard to tear yourself away from someone you love. I know what it's like to be drawn back in with just one smile. This is a very well-written piece. Thanks for sharing. "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
DQ~ Wow I dont know what to say. You got it all out now you just have to let go. Its hard to do that but sooner or later you will be able to. I am sorry that you are going through this. It sounds like you are having a rough time. If you ever want to email me or IM me go ahead. I am here for you. Keep up the good work girl. People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Hey, I liked what Erin said about letting go. Your feelings are written so well into this one, I think you did really good job with it  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Nikkisweet Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 183Tx, Dallas |
My favorite part of the poem was the very end of it. It's always hard to try and forget about a person, but then in the end you can't. I guess that's what love is all about. Well this is really good. Talk to you later! ~Nicole~ ~Writing is filling up your soul with words~ --Me |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Lovebug~thank you so much ERIN~whats your email cause i soo need to fill you in here.. Lakewalker~ hey there Thanks for the supportiveness (if thats a word) Nikkisweet~Hey chica~ I like the end to. This actaully started out as a poem that didnt rhyme, then i wrote the last 4 lines and they rhymed, so i went thro and changed the rest of the poem but neways lol i'll talk to you on the computer sometime  thanks every1~ DQ "A true friend can see the truth and pain in your eyes, even when you're fooling everyone else" |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Yea this was a great poem. Your emotions were clear and appreciated. A great read!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Dopey~Hey babe THanks for replying..Much LuvN~DQ "A true friend can see the truth and pain in your eyes, even when you're fooling everyone else" |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
I'm sorry! I wish I could say I've never been there. The way I see it is there is only one perfect match for everyone, and all the others make room for him! Good work! xoxo Jenn "Guess I'm not smart, I let you un-nerve me, I let you control me; afraid the truth would hurt me, when it's you that hurts me more." TLC |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
*bumping* acire where are you!"A true friend can see the truth and pain in your eyes, even when you're fooling everyone else" |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
it was a very nice poem....i know probaly at leats once in anyones life u feel that way ina Regina |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Didn't I say the idiot mught be there? And did you do what I told you to? Did you smack the idiot at the back of the head for me  Sweets...i'm so sorry you have to go thru this just because one person turns out to be an idiot. I'm not gonna lecture you for I know that's the last thing you'd wanna hear from anyone right now. You know though, this must be the sweetest poem you've ever written so far. hey, next time don't show him that he's affecting you like that. I know it's hard for you to stop your tears, but show him that you're stronger than he thinks. I don't want to say much in here Kiles...everyone reads it. You know how to get a hold of me. I'll always be here to lend an ear for ya. "If only I could touch that frail part of your heart I'll take all your pain away, and leave it for me to bear If only I could reach the inner depths of your soul I'll make sure you understand, that some friends really do care" just a simple one for ya  hope you feel better I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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BaByGuRL Junior Member
since 2000-11-25
Posts 13 |
this is a really great poem! you really know how to express yourself...and i am sad to say that i can relate all to well. keep up the good work. ~babygurl |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
acire~~ hey WELL..he called me after i saw him. and you know how unlike him that is to call out of the blue. i guess we kind of talked things through? and hes like i was hurt you wouldnt talk to me tonite, and i was like..well i was hurt you pushed me away. But since i get my license tomorrow! (jumps for joy ) I'm goin over to his house and we're gonna see what we can do to patch this up a little bit,, even if just friends is the best relationship we can make work, that works for me...hey its better then nothing. but thanks for always being there Babygurl~ I'm glad you can relate, although this realy isnt something to celebrate lol thanks tho XoXo's ~*DQ "A true friend can see the truth and pain in your eyes, even when you're fooling everyone else" |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
~*~ Ahhh i can soooo relate to this poem!!! Isnt it one of the worst feelings having no control?? You almost feel as though the other person is controling you ask though your a puppet...its annoying and it can hurt but you just gotta be strong and try not to let that person do those things to you...Great poem DQ...I loved it!! ~*~ |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Shuagerhigh~ hey chica! Well im glad you can relate to this, although its not really something to be proud of relating to, im just glad im not the only one Thanks!!"A true friend can see the truth and pain in your eyes, even when you're fooling everyone else" |
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