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Ethan Halo
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since 2000-04-28
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on the roof again

0 posted 2000-11-21 02:47 AM


*i saw Lauren's post "suicide" and it made me think back to this one i wrote so long ago. and as you'll see when you read this, you can't just sit, hope, and smile for your friend. you have to help her because there might not be anyone else willing to do so, or even know about it. drop me a line if ya like, Lauren. enjoy*

-friends-

you told me once, some time ago,
that you gave up on life, 'cause it hated you.
but we both agreed you should stay alive
'til you called me up late that night.
you said that we die when it's our time.
i guess your time made up your mind.

i remember you staggering home those nights;
random flings with faceless guys.
selling your innocence to devils in disguise.
it beats seein' a reflection with teary, black eyes.
you were looking for any way to take flight;
fast cars, hot clubs, or a mirror with lines.
yes, i remember carrying you in some nights
and praying you hadn't OD'd and died.

i remember way back to the innocent times.
we were three and had a sandbox and slide.
and we cut ourselves with rusty nails
to become "blood brothers" when we were five.
at six, you hit you head on the curb
because your left shoe was untied.
at age eight, i remember;
your first black eye.
and when you were nine
you ran away for the very first time.

it all flashes back like yesterday.
just like that, it ends today.
all those times you pushed him away;
his knuckles bled from making you stay.
you call me up and through tears you say,
     "it's over now. i'm going away."
          "what do you mean?"
     "he beat me again. i just can't stay."
          "you need somewhere to sleep?"
and you dropped the phone, to my dismay.
there were no good-byes as you stepped away
to the window ledge.
to your judgement day.

i pleaded and screamed into the phone.
i'd never felt so damned alone.
i can only imagine what happened next
as you stepped across the building's edge.
hands outstetched and chin held high.
left shoe, like always, still untied.
inhale deep.
close your eyes.
one step forward.
let out a sigh.

all that pain behind your eyes.
you never let the world know why.
the neglect, the abuse, all the hurt.
the father's hand beneath your skirt.
i wish i'd let others know what i knew.
there's only so much a best friend can do.

now you're here, six stories high.
i thought you were stronger than suicide.
i hope that you're always smiling now;
you'd only smile when i was around.
may there be peace in your death;
there was none in your life.
you joined the world with a scream
and left with a sigh.


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Everyone's got their demons.
We all got somethin' to atone for.

[This message has been edited by Ethan_Halo (edited 11-21-2000).]

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1 posted 2000-11-21 09:06 AM



  Whoa...uhh great poem...yeah..I really don't know what to say...

   ~Carly

peanogrl83
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2 posted 2000-11-21 10:30 AM


Ethan - I recall replying to this poem the first time you posted it, and I shall again - it merits replies each time you post it. EXTREMELY powerful piece.  Probably one of the most powerful posted in this forum, at least that I've seen.  As for the subject of the poem, (and I know this does nothing to ease the pain involved, but I shall feel better saying it)I am sorry that such events occurred.  I too have experienced the suicide of a friend, so I feel I can at least empathize. In any event, kudos.

Vreni

IsGona
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since 2000-07-14
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3 posted 2000-11-21 10:35 AM


This is a very well written poem.  I hope that this not of personal experience.  If it is I send my deepest sympothy.
Best Regards
IsGona

"Every body has their destiny...
I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
~Hatebreed~

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
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On the streets w/ people
4 posted 2000-11-22 03:36 PM


This is so well done, the words seem so strong and powerful.  The feelings behind it seem so real and sincere.  I just feel like I'm totally blown away with this one, I don't know how to put it.  Excellent job, this one is...uh...awsome!   I'm going to add it to my private library thing.

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Nikkisweet
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 183
Tx, Dallas
5 posted 2000-11-22 03:47 PM


This poem made me cry.  It was really good.  You expressed your friend's pain beautifully.  I loved this poem and I think it's my all time favorite poem.  It always seems like a really good poem when you're talking about somthing real and somthing that everyone can relate to.  Good Job!

~Writing is filling up your
soul with words~
--Me

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6 posted 2000-11-25 03:41 AM


Wow the depth within this poem was amazing. Sorry for replying so late, i was gone!
but great job!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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