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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
Rain falls From my eyes Flowing in Gentle rivers Ice falls From your Cold, unforgiving Heart Your cold-hearted words Fall from your lips like snow Freezing my heart with sorrow Frosting the tears on my cheeks The words rain down like hail Falling hard on my boddy Bruising the tear stained flesh Melting the love you left behind ~*~SCG~*~ |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
The words rain down like hail Falling hard on my body I think you did a good job here. keep it up. "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN" ~Hatebreed~ |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Wow... this is a really powerful piece. You do a great job of describing how cold people can be after the lose their love. All you can do is try to move on, and not allow their words to freeze you anymore. Keep up the good work! "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
SCG- This is wonderfully done!  You've expressed these emotions VERY well. Great job!! -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
i sure like the discovery that is shown in this rainy day poem. Liked it alot |
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Demon_knight New Member
since 2000-11-15
Posts 8 |
A heart without pain, A heart without sorrow, A heart that has never felt neglect, A heart that has never felt regect, I a heart that could lead this world, But the only prob is, That heart is a dream. SCG. through my name you can tell, That I have fought through he double hockey sticks! and there was I a time that I ran from love, But I have been nurtired by God above, so what ever problem you might have remember that God is bigger!. and their are friends waiting right here, And my friend that encourged my to post here has talk alot about you, It is jytree When people find true love it's better than ok. But you can be a fool to let love slip away. ME |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I think you did a great job of writing this, the words are strong. Good job "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
Thanks all! I wrote this on a rainy day actually...talk about inspiration! Demon_knight...it seems we have a common frined...Jay is truly my best friend! I miss him bunches! ~*~SCG~*~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this a lot!! Keep up the writing!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
OMG!!! this is really good. so powerful and so sad. i just don't know what to say. hope things get better for ya SCG. thanks for the read I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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