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The Would Have Life
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The Would Have Life |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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The Would Have Life: Left behind pure happiness. My boats a wild steer. I used to have complete bliss, Yet now my life is mere. Friends left behind the wall, And I carry on with sorrow. This is the beginning of my fall Like a never ending tomarrow. Wishing to go back to happiness. My twine is tangled and curled. To end my day with but a kiss Would send my mind a swirl. Yet here I muse over a me of me's. The days I surely wept. Back home there are no fees. It's the life I would have kept.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
Yay i can relate to this one! i totally understand the feelings in that one. great poem  Curly "So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside" -Lenny Kravitz |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
Hey dope...great one i love it i dont really get a lot of your poems just because of the style you have but i do understand this and its great thanks for sharing Branden "put the name of the person u love, not in a heart because they alway break but put it in a circle which last forever" |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
I like it. That's about as simple as I can say it. Keep 'em comin' "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN" ~Hatebreed~ |
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niceguy Member
since 2000-11-13
Posts 113Sapello, NM, USA |
This poem is very powerful dopey. I can relate to your feelings in this one...believe me! Hang in there man and keep writing k? "Don't take love for granted...once it's gone, it hurts." |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
Its awesome...very powerful and wise words....I think Im starting to get the maenings.....i dont know...gresat poem.... Ina |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
I get it. I really think I get it. Almost the entire thing!! Whoa, what's happenin here... well I loved it, I weawy weawy did. ~Carly A word is dead When it is said Some say, I say it just Begins to live That day. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
So now people are understanding your poems?!? Are you feeling ok? ...sorry, ok, good job on expressing this one fairly clearly for all of us Oh, and congrats on having your poem in the newsletter as well ! And I'm not the man, you da man!"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hahaha yea lake......you're right....i am the man *polishes his nails*.....no but seriously......i am getting frightened....people are understanding stuff now. NOOOOOOOOOoooooooooo!!!!!! haha....don't you worry lake.....i just finished the 6th Round 3 days ago with a sum of 154 works.....WOW! Thats triple my usual for a group of works. Anyway....i started the 7th Track and it looks quite complex already! BEWARE!!!! mwhahaha!!! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Sorry I'm late...I've been late in replying lately What Lakewalker said is true...It's easier to understand this than the rest of your poems. I don't need to read it like 5 times anymore Well, what do you expect me to say. I've said every praise about you already. You're very talented. Much envy from me thanks for sharing I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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