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Shivering and Sighing |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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Shivering and Sighing: And there he stood shivering and sighing Wishing to stop the lying. An atomic bomb U-turn from Shangrila Shedding his very essence. His fluid stained clothing rots. Weary soul within decay. To hell with hell! To death with life! Oh me of me's, why so sad? Shiver, sighing. The love that was inspiring. As it were, as it were! May time collapse upon itself, And I fly freely. To be free from limits. The boundary blues. Shivering, sighing, Reighning, and all defying.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Wow...these words were so strong. The way you expressed it was amazing. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Dude, I love this part, I bet you knew someone was going to love this part. "To hell with hell! To death with life!" Great job  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com |
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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
Splendid job, mi amigo! This was great! Absolutely awesome! :.) You're quite the wordsmith..now use some of that ability to write me an email, okay? LOL j/k. Vreni |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Thanks all for the replies. Yea this one is ok........some lines annoy the hell out of me though. But the lines Lake liked hehehe......yea i knew somebody out there in this world would fancy those. I, myself, like them......anyway....adios! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
May time collapse upon itself, And I fly freely. To be free from limits. Nothing new. You wrote a good poem. have you ever thaught of writting a play or a movie. I have a funny feeling that you could really make something great. Any how you rock. keep it up IsGona |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
A play or a movie huh? Well I do have some sort dialogued plays. Only two of them to be exact. I have considered been a play write.......but I don't know......i have to write more plays.... But wow......IsGona, you never cease to raise my self esteem up on my writing. You truly are an inspiration to ME in the sense of my desire to become a better writer. Thanks! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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niceguy Member
since 2000-11-13
Posts 113Sapello, NM, USA |
Great poem Dopey. Strong words...really good. I love the way you write man. Keep it up. Hope things get better for ya. "Don't take love for granted...once it's gone, it hurts." |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
I can see it now! My Life, by Dopey Dope. ANyways, if you ever write a movie or play, lemme read it!!!!! Some ppl say I have talent. I say you have talent!!!!! I think I have lost my mind!!!!! It was taken over by the Lumberjacks at about noon thirty today!!!! I love you!!! Allysa Oh, yeah, love the poem!!!!!!! I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be gray, put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
haha lumberjacks.....glad to see you all likes! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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