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Opening Up |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ 
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~*~Opening Up~*~ Everything you mean to me, I just cant say. Because I just might, try and push you away. It is hard for me, to open up to you. I dont know what, you will say or do. It is hard for me, to just let it all out. I dont know if you'll smile and laugh, or if you'll cry and pout. It is hard for me, so you may have to wait. And when that day comes, I will have my mind to state. ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
Do me a favor...don't sell yourself short on the quality of your poetry anymore. The things I liked most about this one are the clearness of the message and the way you used the key phrase repeatedly to drive the emotional a little further....nice work. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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amazon_lover Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491Dublin,Ireland |
Nice one and good work..I guess no one waits forever...its ambiguity that creates uneasiness..try to live life by simple terms... Sincerely A_L |
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Misty Blue Junior Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 44 |
(sigh) A common mistake made among females.With feelings so strong towards a person that those feelings are hard to express (speaking of myself).Don't get me wrong I really felt yooh and hope there are more to come. You're a great writer. |
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Nikkisweet Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 183Tx, Dallas |
This poem does not express me at all. When I have feelings about a guy, I let them know. And don't do it. It scares them away. I'm trying so hard to keep my feelings inside me, and only in my poetry. Within you I lose myself. Without you I find myself wanting to become lost again. -unkown- |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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