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I Don't Want to Drag You Down
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I Don't Want to Drag You Down |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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Blarg! I Don't Want to Drag you Down: Her scent a rest. Aid me no longer. You'll be dragged along This natural under toe. I thank your kindness. Fake smiles gallore. Just stay away From my aching heart. Don't kiss the fears away. Embrace the light Because I'll just Stay behind like bleeding gobblets. Shunning you from my side. Loving the nothingness within. Just stay away From my aching heart.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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jocelyhn New Member
since 2000-11-14
Posts 7 |
Good Work!!!!!!! Hope to see more!! ~Jocelyhn |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Yet another very strong and well written piece...excellent dopey... |
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niceguy Member
since 2000-11-13
Posts 113Sapello, NM, USA |
Great poem dopey...I like reading your poems. They are very powerful man. Keep it up! niceguy "Don't take love for granted...once it's gone, it hurts." |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Very strong sentiments here Javier ... you've really gotten across the desolate emotional feelings through these words, great expression!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Sheesh, just get a little harsh here! "Shunning you from my side. Loving the nothingness within. Just stay away From my aching heart." But seriously, these are very well expressed emotions here, good job on the poem "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Just how many poems do you write a day? cause you seem to always have something new posted when i check! you are a true poet, keep up the great work ~!*DQ*!~ "A true friend can see the truth and pain in your eyes, even when you're fooling everyone else" |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
HOw many poems do i write a day?....Hmmmmmm I'd say that I average out to a poem every other day. Sometimes I'll stop for 2 days straight but then one day i'll write 5 poems. The most poems i've ever written in one day was 6. I was bored and in the hospital, what better could I do with my time?!? hehe.... Anyway thank you all for the replies. Lake.....you know you're the man....thanks for liking this along with all my others... I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
Awesome poem dopey, once again. they're all soo good! great poem Curly "So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside" -Lenny Kravitz |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
hey there...its a great poem It has great feeling to it...wise words.... this poem was very descroptive.... ~ina~ |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
I like... good job! Jenn "Guess I'm not smart, I let you un-nerve me, I let you control me; afraid the truth would hurt me, when it's you that hurts me more." TLC |
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