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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA 
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My heart beats faster.. as you lie next to me I feel myself.. melting into you.. Your love consumes me.. my breath is yours Chills down my spine.. as im surrounded by your touch Memorizing every feature.. as you stare into my eyes I can feel you.. falling "A true friend can see the truth and pain in your eyes, even when you're fooling everyone else" |
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DreamerGrl27 Member
since 2000-10-29
Posts 142 |
I loved this...all the words fit together perfectly...I loved this part so much: Your love consumes me.. my breath is yours |
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niceguy Member
since 2000-11-13
Posts 113Sapello, NM, USA |
You captured the feelings of having the one you care about near you perfectly. This is an poem girl...you are a good writer. You know how to use just the right words. Good job! niceguy "Don't take love for granted...once it's gone, it hurts." |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Wow you really advertised this one well with the NEW NEW NEW!! It really caught my eye!! Hehe...this poem in my opinion was soooo romantic!! Isnt it an amazing feeling laying next to the person thats o-so-important to you?? I thought this was great! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Oh wow, this one is cool. You did such a great job of writing it, I like it  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com |
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silvrduck Member
since 2000-11-05
Posts 146 |
Amazing post girl! So so sweet and i'm with Niceguy on this one... you're a great writer! keep it up! ~Sarah with the unknown comes no expectations in this i find my peace |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a great poem. It's so sweet, I'd love to fall like that anytime! It's good to see you posting again! False gems may shine as brightly as the genuine article, but there are always those who can tell the difference. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Hey Sweets --- Now, this one sounds much better than the other one you posted. Glad to see what you had as an explanation though. I thought, no!!! not you too  I'm glad that everything is going your way  playa <---he he he just kidding. i love the poem  hope to hear from you soon. You're never on anymore laterI see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Great poem! Keep posting  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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jocelyhn New Member
since 2000-11-14
Posts 7 |
Good Job!!!! That is an excellent expression of opinions!!! I hope you write more like this, it is one that I realy enjoy!!~Jocelyhn |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Wow! thanks so much guys for replying! Means alotacire~ hey sweetie! LOL i knew right when i posted that other poem that you were gonna get all worried about me. maybe i did it on purpose jk i wouldnt do a thing like that. playa huh? lol real cute, talk to you soon!"A true friend can see the truth and pain in your eyes, even when you're fooling everyone else" |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I don't see you on anymore so I'll make your poems a chat room j/k you know what i mean when i said playa, right? well, it's about you winning, i guess....does that make better sense? I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
acire~> LOL ya i get it now..and just for future reference..i'll let you know what the poem i post is really what im doing thro, ok? so you dont have to worry until im able to reply and let you know! ~!*Kiley*!~ "A true friend can see the truth and pain in your eyes, even when you're fooling everyone else" |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
yeah sweets that sounds fail OMG im drunk already..i took a 3 hour lunch and had like 5 long islands..that's it for me.  so, when you gonna be on again sweets? I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
acire~ 3hour lunch break?? 5 long islands..tisk tisk. thats bad I'm on all the time..i'll try and be on tomorrow at like 5ish ? maybe if im home. i'll try! bye babe**~!*Kiley*!~ "A true friend can see the truth and pain in your eyes, even when you're fooling everyone else" |
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