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Not Yet Breathing |
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silvrduck Member
since 2000-11-05
Posts 146 |
It's got one big ol' hidden meaning behind it, that I'm not going to explain.. but maybe some of you can still relate in some way. (though for your sake, I hope not!  )Not Yet Breathing Along the way somewhere I fell Hit so hard, too late to yell So hold my breath, I will keep on Need a new base of something strong Tired and weary, eyes of stone Wait for the next thing to face alone Live the secrets, the truth in lies Nothing, solely dry tears to cry. ~Sarah October 21, 2000 with the unknown comes no expectations in this i find my peace |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I can definately relate to this one...and i dont think that the meaning behind this needs to be pointed out..i think its expressed...or i might just be able to see it cause i feel the same. All i know is its a horrible, uncontrolable and overwhelming feeling...its like once you fall..thats it..you cant get up and if you ever do you fall again or twice as hard..so i think i understand where your coming from..im sorry you feel like this tho...e-mail me if you ever need to talk =o) Good post hun |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a very good poem. We all have times like this in our lives, but we just have to realize that the "strong base" should be ourselves. I hope writing this helped you feel better. Keep up the great work! False gems may shine as brightly as the genuine article, but there are always those who can tell the difference. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I think this is very well written, the flow of it is great and...and...I just really liked how it's written for some reason Thanks for sharing this!"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was great!!! Although it was oftly sad, I could def. relate.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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