Ode to my ex psychotic boyfriend...(couldnt think of anything nice to say)

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Ode to my ex psychotic boyfriend...(couldnt think of anything nice to say)

Ceinwyn
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since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

0 posted 2000-11-12 01:51 PM

22.4.00

Lessons learned
Heart's scorned
Soul's burned

Eye's red
Emotional fire fed
Once I found your memory dead
Amongst the clutter
And cobbwebbs in my head

Fast forward all the things once said
Erase all the things we once did
I moved on
Did you?
Or do you still see our future
Reflecting in my eyes of blue

Child of the Stars

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since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

1 posted 2000-11-12 03:32 PM

  Hey. I really liked this, I could see your anger and stufff...great job. "Emotional fire fed" That's a really great phrase. Well, see yaz. Keep writing, you're relaly great.

  ~Carly

A word is dead
When it is said
Some say,
I say it just
Begins to live
That day.

curlygurly
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since 2000-09-12

Posts 276
USA

2 posted 2000-11-12 04:22 PM

This was awesome. I know how you feel, i hate my ex, he sucks. but of course they always give you a reason to hate them, we don't just make it up.

Curly

"So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside"
-Lenny Kravitz

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2000-11-12 05:48 PM

i thought the poem was great but the title so does not match. Anyway I liked this one a lot.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

4 posted 2000-11-12 08:25 PM

Wow, this one is really cool, good job on it!

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

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StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31

Posts 932
Colorado

5 posted 2000-11-12 08:31 PM

Oh, the thins exes can do to us...just remember, all that one can cause should give you reason to move on...not hate or call for vengeance. Just don't let the hate you have for him in your heart consume you. Glad you've moved on though! The poem itself was pretty descriptive and your thoughts were deifitely conveyed through the words you chose. Nice writing!

*Being an angel doesn't mean having a halo or wings, it means doing the right thing and wanting to make a difference*

Jacman
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since 2000-06-27

Posts 291
Dwight Il, US

6 posted 2000-11-13 01:55 PM

Psycotic huh? Well, you are one hundered percent entitled to feel that way so more power to ya! Nifty poem to put it all down.
Nice work!

jason

I'm not concieted...I'm convinced.

Jenn Cirrincione

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since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

7 posted 2000-11-13 05:26 PM

I could've sworn I replied to this! Guess I must have read it and forgot! OOOPS....!
Anyway, this was a really cool poem, I could probably dedicate it to a person or two! Love it! Good work, and I'm sorry I didn't reply when I first read this.
Jenn

"Guess I'm not smart, I let you un-nerve me, I let you control me; afraid the truth would hurt me, when it's you that hurts me more." TLC

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