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Teen Poetry #3

my neck injury

Jose Marti
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since 2000-07-01

Posts 374
washing DC

0 posted 2000-11-11 10:31 PM

eyes twitch
nerves flash,
and it begins in the blink of an eye

fists fly throught the air
wisking in speed,
a foot connects on a rib cage,

the victim slides back,
crouches,
soots forward like a
large predetory beast.

throwing the would-be victor
sialing through the air,
onto his neck.

It ends as suddenly as it began,
it all happens in a heart beat.

[This message has been edited by Jose Marti (edited 11-11-2000).]

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2000-11-11 11:38 PM

This was great jose!
You're hobby of that brasilian dance/karate thing hurting you?

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

Isabel Galaxia
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since 2000-06-18

Posts 733

2 posted 2000-11-12 10:44 AM

Ouch that sounds really painful..ouch. Nice job Jose, keep it up

Don't get hurt...
Bel

curlygurly
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since 2000-09-12

Posts 276
USA

3 posted 2000-11-12 11:25 AM

wow you sure do know how to express pain. i hope that you aren't in too much pain. but ya know painkillers are the best thing in the world!

Curly

"So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside"
-Lenny Kravitz

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

4 posted 2000-11-12 04:45 PM

This was really great, it's so dramatic!

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

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Jose Marti
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since 2000-07-01

Posts 374
washing DC

5 posted 2000-11-13 06:34 PM

Dopey: yeah, I get hurt sometimes, but it's a decent work out, and besides I could defend myself if I ever got into a real fight.

Bel: I'll try not to get hurt, I promise

CurlyGirly: I can express pain because I go through so much of it.

LAkewalker:
thanks, I'm glad you like my poem.

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