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Tia Junior Member
since 2000-05-05
Posts 41massachusetts |
Hidden tears, afraid to escape. hidden fears, of upcoming fate. The future buried in the past, afraid of being different, of being chosen last. the hurtful words repeating in his head the attemps that never worked the longing to be dead the soundless screams that never were heard you could see it in his eyes though he never said a word he's too afraid to speak to let his emotions run free people judged him from his past they didn't take the time to see that he was just hurting inside that so called "cold heart" if it wasn't for society he wouldn't be ripped apart he would be real happy not a man afraid to see he'd be an individual no what everyone expects him to be... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was great but i seriously think that people should stop hiding behind masks. Because you know..........this "he" yer talkin about is hiding behind masks being what others want him to be, but i am completely sure those others are hiding behind their own society built masks. Sometimes in being different we're praised, and in other occasions we are set aside. Either way we have to be who we are....nuff said.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
I agree with dopey. people shouldn't be worried about what others think of them but it's part of society and what the media has made it's perfect. hopefully it will be better soon, but for now the real courage is being yourself.  Curly "So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside" -Lenny Kravitz |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Dopey said everthing so perfect...If you try to be something other then yourself then thats the way people are gonna look at you...People these days just need to be themselves instead of what others want them to be... ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I thought this poem was amazing...Sooo many people can relate to this "he" that you speak of. I too agree with Dopey. But i thought that the point you were trying to express in this poem was excellent...it also flowed very nicely. |
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Lani_DarkOne Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 152UK |
others give masks to people to hide behind..I don't think it's purely self-inflicted... excellent poem Tia..those words mean alot..I can't quote, 'cause that would ruin the whole flow..but..it's brilliant, keep posting  "Controlling my feelings for too long.... And forcing our darkest souls to unfold... And pushing us into self-destruction...." *~Muse*~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I think you did a great job on the poem! I think Lani said it great, yes some people build masks but society's also there handing them out. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I do agree with all at a certain point, but we have to understand that we in a certain point in our life all have worn a mask. Not because of society, but because of our own discretion. Nobody tells us to wear them, the bottom line is, it's all up to you. Well, it doesn't help that as said, society hands them out too. I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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