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Nikkisweet
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0 posted 2000-11-10 06:24 PM



If you leave
I'll cry everyday
Because you told me words
That no one else could say

If you leave
My heart will bruise
And God will be
The one I acuse

If you leave
I'll wonder why
God brought you in my life
And now I sit here any cry

If you leave
I might have to, too
Cause I'll be living lonley
All without you

Please don't leave
Not now, not ever
You're my one true love
We're soposed to be together...forever

*~dedicated to the love of my life; his life could be in danger by somone at school that doesn't like him~*...


~Guys are like stars,
there are millions
of them, but only
one can make you dreams
come true~

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Lakewalker
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1 posted 2000-11-11 11:15 AM


I think you did a good job on the poem   I hope everything turns out fine.  I wouldn't blame God though, but I won't go off on that.  Again, good job on the poem

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Jenn Cirrincione
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2 posted 2000-11-11 12:31 PM


Up until the last caption about his life being in danger, I was about to say that you can go on if this person leaves you. If they left then it wasn't meant to be, and you'll become whole once again.
Now, I realize you wrote this for an entirely different reason.   I have no real words of wisdom for you, just try and convince your "other half" to be careful. Good poem here!
Jenn

"Guess I'm not smart, I let you un-nerve me, I let you control me; afraid the truth would hurt me, when it's you that hurts me more." TLC

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3 posted 2000-11-11 12:32 PM


ooooops! Hit reply twice!  "Guess I'm not smart, I let you un-nerve me, I let you control me; afraid the truth would hurt me, when it's you that hurts me more." TLC

[This message has been edited by Jenn Cirrincione (edited 11-11-2000).]

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4 posted 2000-11-11 03:56 PM


Hey great poem........It's not God's fault though.

BUT ANYWAY if his life is in danger.....threatening to kill somebody and such is bad. You can get the cops to get a protection agreement or something like that saying that the kid cannot be within certain yards of yer BF



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5 posted 2000-11-11 05:44 PM


Dopey's right...it wouldnt be gods fault but it would be extremely unfair and you would constantly question yourself why he was given to you only to be taken away but i pray that it wont be the case. Hopefully everything will turn out fine hun..great poem.
curlygurly
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6 posted 2000-11-11 09:14 PM


Great poem. i know how you feel, but the "love of my life" turned out to be blinding me from the truth. you never know if it was meant to be until you take that vacation from eachother. and for your sake i hope he never leaves like mine did.  
Curly


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Erin
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7 posted 2000-11-11 09:26 PM


Nikki~
I hope that everything turns out for the best with your bf...

This was a really good poem...Losing someone close to you because of violence is the worst...I lost someone that was really close to me...And I cant get over that fact that he is gone...

But can I ask you why he is in danger from someone at school???


~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

Nikkisweet
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8 posted 2000-11-11 09:40 PM


I don't know why he's in danger....some guy just held a gun to his head and told him that he was going to kill him the next day. This was Friday that he was "soposed" to be killed, but the guy didn't show up at school so my boyfriend got lucky.   I'm so thankful.  I love him so much.  Everyone tells me that I don't know what love is...but I do.

~Guys are like stars,
there are millions
of them, but only
one can make you dreams
come true~

Jose Marti
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9 posted 2000-11-11 10:49 PM


did that seriously happen?
did he go to the police?
has rhis guy been caught yet?

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10 posted 2000-11-27 04:37 PM


someone came to school and pointed a gun at your boyfriend?  Why haven't you told the school or the cops about this.  His life has been threatened.  I think you should tell a parent or someone who can do something baout it.  This is a really serious matter, and i see you're not taking it lightly either.  Bt go tell someone about it.

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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