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The Battle of Pillow Wickey and Devila
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The Battle of Pillow Wickey and Devila |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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NOTE: These two characters were made up by my nephew (6yrs old). He didn't understand that you just can't be a bad boy. My mother (his granny) decided to teach him about the good angel and bad angel on each shoulder. She told him to name each one.....and these were the names he gave them. PW=good...devila=bad. So i wrote a poem about all this. The Battle of Pillow Wickey and Devila: Pillow Wickey and Devila cried out war. Pillow Wickey and Devila cried no more. For they died in battle in a serious fight To see which had the most powerful might. A wage against quarrels of good and bad To see which part of world's they had. It lasted for days, and months, and years. All that came were the lonley tears. A mental bunker then was formed In contradiction to a future warned. Avoiding life completely mere, And making sure that it is dear. Pillow Wickey and Devila have been here all of time. Dodging war and loving love is within state of mind. Judgement calls and logic ways are simply to survive. Ah my foes, and oh my friends to be is being alive! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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apsara Member
since 2000-11-09
Posts 70 |
I've heard about these angels in some religions that are just there supposedly on our shoulders as recorders of our good or bad deeds. Its a very imaginative poem and one that I've thoroughly enjoyed. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey. I thought that this was really interesting. Something that can seem to simple to little kids is actually a complicated mess..I really liked the way you put all this into a great poem. Well, catcha on the flipside. ~Carly |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
I remeber watching garfield and he had those angels on his shoulders......hehehe it was very intersting...sometimes the youngest people r the wiset...nice ppoem ~Ina~ |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I loved your concept in this Javier ... you've got a very creative and fun mom! You've encompassed these thoughts well, and I enjoy the idea of this. I've always felt we each have these little fellows on our shoulders, whispering away and battling it out, much enjoyed!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I think this is a very creative way of explaining this, the poem is extremely well done. I love it! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I'm glad you all thought this was creative. And kit, yes my mom is very fun and well.... i get my personality from her. How scary! Anyway thanks for the posts!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Dopey Dope
Moderator
Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
OK don't hate me for this but i really wanna bump this one up. I kinda like this one a bit and i'd like to squeeze a few more replies. I see we have a lot of new members, so i'd like this bump to be for them and all other members who haven't replied. Oh well... BUMP!!!!!!! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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niceguy Member
since 2000-11-13
Posts 113Sapello, NM, USA |
I am impressed again Dopey. Great poem man! |
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mopey Junior Member
since 2000-11-14
Posts 12 |
this is such a cute poem. good job! i love how you got your idea, very unique. write more, really do.  |
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Rhiannon Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 95Fayetteville, TN USA |
I loved the way this rhymed. A powerful yet simple moral lesson. Good job! love leslie The night is my companion The solitude my guide Would I spend forever here And not be satisfied? Sarah MacLachlan, "Possession" |
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