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A fire
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A fire |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
A fire rages Deep inside Burning hotter and hotter As it lays Time goes by The fire burns bright Kept to a corner But growing white At its cage It burns away It's fiery rage Waste it lays "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \ I am lost in my own mind. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was great. I loved how it was burning and then died in the end. Beautiful!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
i like the symbolism of the fire as the feelings you have, great poem  jeremy r "...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I have a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~ |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
Thanks, glad that ya like it. Ugh, I wish I had more time of late, heh, maybe I should just take a break from programming and read/write more poetry. "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \ I am lost in my own mind. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I also think this one is great, it really is done well. ...And I always suggest people take lots of breaks "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Lani_DarkOne Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 152UK |
Yeah..can picture fire as rage..that dies, as fire does...great idea..I liked it.. "Controlling my feelings for too long.... And forcing our darkest souls to unfold... And pushing us into self-destruction...." *~Muse*~ |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
Yeah, breaks are good, but I'm kinda said I'd try to get a working alpha of the CCS by the end of three weeks, and I've got the biggest part of it ahead of me, and a week and half left to work. And I as of yet to get a working algorythem for this part. Two more ideas then I'm gonna start playing around with using objects. ANYWAY, I'll get off that Tangent, I'm glad you like the poem always love to hear people like my work. Hopefully you'll be seeing a bit more of me 'round here soon."Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \ I am lost in my own mind. |
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