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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ 
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Forever??? If forever was to end in a day, would you prove your love to me? If forever was to end in an hour, would you hold me close? If forever was to end in a minute, would you tell me you loved me one last time? If forever was to end in a second, would you give me one last kiss good~bye? If forever was to end right now, would you wipe away that last tear that would fall? ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ [This message has been edited by ERIN (edited 11-09-2000).] |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
for some reason, i have this feeling in me that you are doubting your man. Are you? Or in another sense, you could be asking him to prove himself to you. If forever was to end I'd tell you i cherish our e-friendship  later cheese cake  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
That was great!! I really did want to cry when I read that, it was beautiful! Keep up the great work, look forward to reading more from you soon!! Luv, Priscilla ~*~ YeStErDaY iS tHe PaSt, 2mOrRoW iS ThE fUtUrE, ToDaY iS a GiFt, ThAt'S wHy We CaLl iT ThE pReSeNt. ~*~ |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
I really like the idea behind this one...very unique, very sweet! I dunno if it was written from experience, but I can definitely relate to it right now, so thanks so much for posting it! keep it up kid. ~Kris ~*Things you see the way you see them will never be seen again*~ ~All that I have found in reason is reason just to not believe.~ |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
This was really cool. It seems like you might not have too much faith in the person your with. I hope I am wrong but if any of it is true good luck and great poem Jon |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Hey girlie! Long time no talk huh?  Sorry! This was great, but yeah sounds like you're having some doubts? Maybe you should show this to him, if you havent alrready. 'Cause doubts arent good. Keep a smile on your face and have a great day! <3 always** ¤Kiley¤ "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King "A true friend can see the truth and pain in your eyes, even when yo |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
erin it's been a while since I've seen you post. This is good I like it. what man would ever say no to those kind of questions? |
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DreamerGrl27 Member
since 2000-10-29
Posts 142 |
This was really good...I loved the style of it and especially the last two lines, it was such a perfect ending. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This poem is really good, I like how it's simple but means a lot. Great writing "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This seemed sad for me because i mean......who'd want forever to end? Let's hope it doesn't eh?  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Thank you all so much for the replies...No this has nothing to do with a personal experience...I started writing this a while ago and I just finished it...I was finally able to write the rest of it... ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
I love it ERIN!!! it was so cute Oh, yea, nice pic If you love someone dont put their name in a heart, put their name in a circle, because a heart can be broken but a circle is continious. |
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Tia Junior Member
since 2000-05-05
Posts 41massachusetts |
it was a very nice poem. i'm glad you got to finish it. good job erin |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
That was really good erin. it's something all girls wonder about their guys. like if forever is to end will you be there with me? by the way nice pic, ur so pretty! Curly "So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside" -Lenny Kravitz |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Thanks for the replies Tamma, Tia and Curly...They really mean alot to me...And thanks for the compliments on my pic...I dont really like that one...Its my prom picture... ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
ERIN...Dont feel bad about the pic...i dont like mine either...but as soon as i find someone with a scanner, im putting up my Senior pic...its much better If you love someone dont put their name in a heart, put their name in a circle, because a heart can be broken but a circle is continious. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Tamma~ I was trying to load my other pic but for some reason it wont work so now I have to wait... ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
I really like this, but I wouldn't want forever to end. I don't think that if forever would end today, that Justin would really care, because he probably wouldn't know forever was ending. Anyways, I'm starting to confuse myself, so anyways, I really really like this. Oh yeah and nice picture! Allysa I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be gray, put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad. |
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