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Fruit Juice Love
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Fruit Juice Love |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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NOTE: ok this poem is just plain messed up. I love the style cuz im just messed up along with it. The meaning.....sure...lot's of it but try and get it on your own hehe....and ummm.....I don't like the poem as a whole.....but maybe if i break it into verses and seperate them into random incoherencies it'd be quite amusing to me.....oh well..  Fruit Juice Love: Pissing out a war of emotion. Spreading all over the secret peach potion. Bleeding clots of stand still time. Wondering if it was ever mine. Spitting in my lacteal love. A shining hell from up above. Nectar, pulp prevents my flow. The demons that I'll always know.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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~SwEEt_LiL_GirL~ Junior Member
since 2000-11-04
Posts 21 |
Dopey_Dope Very interesting? I think, i don't really know i do get it in my own way but then i don't look at the meaning that much and i just see words!! Could you tell me what you think the meaning of the poem is? Yeah it is sick and twisted but what else does it mean? well good job.. keep up the good work and thanks for responding to my poems!! |
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Rhiannon Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 95Fayetteville, TN USA |
I liked it Ugly words usually get the best and worst reactions to people. Good job. love leslie The night is my companion The solitude my guide Would I spend forever here And not be satisfied? Sarah MacLachlan, "Possession" |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey man. Dark, deep, insane. I just loved it. ~Carly |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I have no clue how to reply to this, just wanted to let you know I read it "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Lakewalker said it for me too Jon |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Lakewalker said it for me too Jon |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
ClueleSs as to what you werE thinking when you wroTe it, but I understAnd it in my own screWed up way and I dUg it, so kudos to you. "a Shining hEll from up aBove" <--- Nice twist on such an overUsed clicHe  that's all I have to say. ~krIs ~*Things you see the way you see them will never be seen again*~ ~When it comes to me, you have to stretch your definition of normal a little bit.~ |
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Dopey Dope
Moderator
Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hehehe.......this poem got some odd replies from the public. To be honest, it's late. For me to delve within the meaning of the poem it takes time. Even I forget and lose track of what I was thinking of at the moment. I have to go back in time and figure it all out just like you all would have to! haha.....Lots of symbolism in this poem though. Hehehe...glad you add read, and glad you could all take a peak into my slight insanity. To be honest, I have poems that are 20 times more messed up than this but I wouldn't be allowed to post them. Anyway glad you read, and i hope to get more replies to this poem. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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