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Rhiannon Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 95Fayetteville, TN USA |
Crush crush crush me I shouldn't be standing beside you They say Hush hush hush me I shouldn't be saying this to you They say Does it last forever? My teeth scrape your skin I run from the pain within But the shadows follow The walls are hollow And I hear your voice Hear you say I love you till I die Does it last forever? I'm living despite This respite I long to feel your eyes Your hands on me, responsive but They say we are too young To know what is good for us They say we shouldn't be But for my sanity I need you here with me I would But it's too hard to think Crush me I'm crushing The feelings I feel So I can live without you here If this isn't love I'm blind To the image of you standing In front of me wishing We were alone If this isn't love I'm deaf To the sound Of your voice and the pound Of your heart and mine Singing despite This respite But what does it matter? If this isn't love, I'm incapable And forever, if it's true, I'm in debt to you For giving me love When I needed you to. The night is my companion The solitude my guide Would I spend forever here And not be satisfied? Sarah MacLachlan, "Possession" |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was a wonderful poem. I loved the ending.....made me smirk a bit. Kind of sweet that you got the love when you needed to. Wonderful!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I liked the flow of this one. I think you did a very good job on it, it's got real feelings in it. Thanks for sharing it with us  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey. I really loved this, it flowed sooo well and everything. Great job. ~Carly |
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Rhiannon Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 95Fayetteville, TN USA |
Thank you again everyone! The night is my companion The solitude my guide Would I spend forever here And not be satisfied? Sarah MacLachlan, "Possession" |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
The only thIng I do not like aBout your poems is that theY're all so darn good, I can't say aNything to compliMent them as they deserve to be Complimented. This one is my favorIte of yours so far, so I'm not even going to try to tell you how muCh I loved it...words would faiL me. ~Kris ~*Things you see the way you see them will never be seen again*~ ~When it comes to me, you have to stretch your definition of normal a little bit.~ |
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