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Goodbye Small Town
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Goodbye Small Town |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC 
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I used to live in a small mountain town. I HATED IT. I wrote this just before I moved to the city to go to school. It's not the best poem,but I had fun writing it.  I'm so fed up with being so down I wanna change my life, I wanna leave this town Staying here don't do no good for me I'm gonna break these small town chains, I gotta be free In this town my pain fills the air Suffocating me with overwhelming despair There's the girl I can't have and my folks can't have me The job that sucks and my friends won't let me be I'm gonna move on, I'm gonna change my way Gettin' the hell outta here, and I'm starting today Packing my bags and I'm headin' to the city For the bright lights, big sounds, where all the girls are pretty The city is packed with crime that kills But instead of running for them I'm running from the hills Running from my problems, running like hell They say it won't solve em' but maybe it will I can forget the girl and drop my fam Even quit my job cause I don't give a damn I'm gonna have a life that I can call my own And I will have more fun than I have ever known Opportunities rising in the air Things may get tough but I don't care Cause I'm gonna make it, I'm gonna succeed I'm gonna live my life happy and free I will rise to the challenge and won't back down And I'll never think twice about that little town |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was great. A little bitterness against that town but hey.....thats fine with me. I hate small towns too. There's nothing to do there! I live in the big city so it's all good. Glad yer livin it up!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Powerfully written Keoni! You've expressed your emotions well, and closed with such a positive "got get em'" attitude. Sometimes we need that, to get rolling and begin to make a life for ourselves ... though I've found it's always so nice to get back to friends and family for a visit once settled in to the new life too. Very emotive writing!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
Well, i thought i expresseds my feelings fully but i dont think i do cuz right here you have showed me up. You have wrote about moving and running from fears something i write against doing but i still love the poem its powerfull. Hey, so what happend are you happy now? "put the name of the person u love, not in a heart because they alway break but put it in a circle which last forever" |
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Rhiannon Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 95Fayetteville, TN USA |
I know all about the small towns and there are so many bad things about them....but there are good things too. You expressed a lot of the bad feelings i've had about them. I liked it.love leslie The night is my companion The solitude my guide Would I spend forever here And not be satisfied? Sarah MacLachlan, "Possession" |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Wow, sounds like you really hated that small town! It sounds like you must like it in the city Good poem, it really expresses your dislike of that town and gives a sense of optimism by moving on."Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Thanx for the replies. It is nice to be in the city now because it makes visiting that much nicer. I can actually be proud of the town now that I am not stuck in it. It is a dead end town and leaving it gives me a sense of satisfaction every time I think about it. Thanks again Keoni |
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