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Wet Member
since 1999-07-25
Posts 60Brentwood, Tn |
Goddess of the morning light You hold a sharp edge of beauty like a sword. Perfect stillness surrounds me, As your soft breath caresses my every thought. The blue in your eyes And the touch of your soft pleasant smell, Dances around me as if I were an empty stage. For the extreme pleasure just looking at you almost puts me into misery, Into Misery, Because I am not a part of you. All I hold is your heart, But my soul craves more. I want you for every second that your breath streams across my skin. I want to dance with you on an empty moonlit stage. My moonlit stage where the stars are brightest. My life, Now part of yours Will be just the beginning of a passionate voyage in the realm of light. Mist and Fog will join us as the height of our exploration. And light from the rise of the sun will wake us from our stage, And rejoin us to humanity. |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was great. i got the meaning of it all and the message was wonderful. I liked this very much. You've been missing for a while, glad to see you back.  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
very good poem. i loved the meaning of it all. San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Hey, This is so good, I really like it. great job  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey! I loved this! Every single aspect of it! Terrific job!!! ~Carly< !signature--> 747 fell out of Heaven Crashed through the roof of a 7-11 You're working on a slurpee Things get hazy Reach for a twinkie now you're pushing up daisies? Do you know where you're gonna go? [This message has been edited by Child of the Stars (edited 11-06-2000).] |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
BRAVO!!! One excellent piece if i may say. Your descriptive ways is unique and just plain beautiful. I love it. keep sharing...please. it would be an honor to read your other works. I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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