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sweetcollege_girl
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just about where I want to be

0 posted 2000-11-04 04:27 PM



To feel your touch
To hold your hand
To hug you tight
Would be heaven

To say your name
In a gentle whisper
To have you near
Would be perfect

To kiss you softly
To be near you
To belong to you
Would be a dream come true

To listen to each other
To be there for each other
To comfort each other
Is a fantasy

Right here in your arms
Is where I belong
It's where I want to be
Forever

~*~SCG~*~

© Copyright 2000 Lavada Miller - All Rights Reserved
Dopey Dope
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1 posted 2000-11-04 04:48 PM


Hey this was a great poem to share with us, the message was great. You write a lot of love poems. I thought, however, that the ryhme scheme was all over the place. It got quite confusing with the flow.
But once again, i liked the poem all together.



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curlygurly
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2 posted 2000-11-04 05:25 PM


This was a great poem. i've felt the exact same way about a guy. it's so awesome when it actually happens, but you don't realize how good it is until you don't have it anymore.  
Curlz


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3 posted 2000-11-04 05:59 PM


This is such a sweet and romantic poem...ahhh love =o)
Kit McCallum
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4 posted 2000-11-05 08:14 AM


Lovely and tender thoughts SCG ... very nicely penned!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Lakewalker
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5 posted 2000-11-05 12:30 PM


Wonderful feelings and wonderful poem, it's very good

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sweetcollege_girl
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6 posted 2000-11-06 12:18 PM


Thanks Dopey...I thought the rhyme scheme was a little off at first, but I figured it flowed well all the same.. And yes, I do write lots of love poems. It seems easier to write them  

Curly- thanks for the compliment!  

SugarHigh- thanks..My husband thought so too  

Kit- I have awful penmanship lol   thanks!

Lakewalker- Thanks for the reply!  

~*~SCG~*~

Stephanya
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7 posted 2000-11-06 02:41 PM


Awwww such a sweet little tear jerker. Good Job!  


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whether or not you feel as though the friendship or relationship is about to end."
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Slim
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since 2000-07-19
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Kentucky, USA
8 posted 2000-11-06 09:24 PM


this is soo sweet! great way of expressing your feelings.. loved it.. nice work!  

Slim


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9 posted 2000-11-07 10:45 AM


seems like you 2 are doing much better now.  Is he still gone?  Such a sweet poem, he must be deserving of it.  Stay happy

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10 posted 2000-11-07 03:05 PM


"Right here in your arms
Is where I belong
It's where I want to be
Forever"

This is such a sweet poem. I also love writing love poems, they are great to write, aren't they? You do a good job of it, that's for sure! Keep up the great work!

False gems may shine as brightly as the genuine article, but there are always those who can tell the difference.



sweetcollege_girl
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just about where I want to be
11 posted 2000-11-07 03:54 PM


thanks everybody for your replies! I truly didn't think I would get that many! My husband  is back, but we are both leaving today. We are on our way to Dallas..I'm not sure if I will have internet access or not, so don't change too much while I'm gone!  

~*~SCG~*~

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