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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
To feel your touch To hold your hand To hug you tight Would be heaven To say your name In a gentle whisper To have you near Would be perfect To kiss you softly To be near you To belong to you Would be a dream come true To listen to each other To be there for each other To comfort each other Is a fantasy Right here in your arms Is where I belong It's where I want to be Forever ~*~SCG~*~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hey this was a great poem to share with us, the message was great. You write a lot of love poems. I thought, however, that the ryhme scheme was all over the place. It got quite confusing with the flow. But once again, i liked the poem all together.  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
This was a great poem. i've felt the exact same way about a guy. it's so awesome when it actually happens, but you don't realize how good it is until you don't have it anymore.  Curlz "So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside" -Lenny Kravitz |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This is such a sweet and romantic poem...ahhh love =o) |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Lovely and tender thoughts SCG ... very nicely penned! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Wonderful feelings and wonderful poem, it's very good "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
Thanks Dopey...I thought the rhyme scheme was a little off at first, but I figured it flowed well all the same.. And yes, I do write lots of love poems. It seems easier to write them Curly- thanks for the compliment! SugarHigh- thanks..My husband thought so too Kit- I have awful penmanship lol thanks!Lakewalker- Thanks for the reply! ~*~SCG~*~ |
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Stephanya Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 63Berkshire County~USA~ |
Awwww such a sweet little tear jerker. Good Job!  (:***stephani***:) "A true friend will always stay a friend whether or not you feel as though the friendship or relationship is about to end." :: |
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Slim Junior Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 49Kentucky, USA |
this is soo sweet! great way of expressing your feelings.. loved it.. nice work! Slim "just because you dont know it or havent seen it, doesnt mean it isnt possible" |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
seems like you 2 are doing much better now. Is he still gone? Such a sweet poem, he must be deserving of it. Stay happy I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
"Right here in your arms Is where I belong It's where I want to be Forever" This is such a sweet poem. I also love writing love poems, they are great to write, aren't they? You do a good job of it, that's for sure! Keep up the great work! False gems may shine as brightly as the genuine article, but there are always those who can tell the difference. |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
thanks everybody for your replies! I truly didn't think I would get that many! My husband is back, but we are both leaving today. We are on our way to Dallas..I'm not sure if I will have internet access or not, so don't change too much while I'm gone! ~*~SCG~*~ |
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