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A Girl's Dream Life
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A Girl's Dream Life |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
She's born,and everyone adores her The first granddaughter First Niece to her aunts And her parent's first daughter She lives a happy childhood Afternoons in the park Celebrating birthdays And playing until dark Her teenage life is full of drama With a full social life Girls want her at their parties And guys want her for a wife She goes off to college Alongside her high school love And she's so popular Like she's sent from above She's engaged to her first love About 25 years old They set the wedding date And everyone is told They raise a family together In the most beautiful house She was never lonely And dies sleeping quiet as a mouse "So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside" -Lenny Kravitz |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Hmm...the perfect life..has it ever happened? I doubt it, hey don't feel too bad, it all happens for a reason, lol. Great girl keep it up Bel |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Curly~ This kind of life would be just perfect...If only it could be just as perfect as this...Only in the fairy tales though...Good job!!! ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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cutie2005 Member
since 2000-04-30
Posts 148Bennett, Colorado USA |
This is a great poem!! I liked it.. Really catchy, and dreamy. Even though I would picture my dream life just to be normal.. hehe but most to dream of what you had just wrote!! Good job, hope to hear more!! Luv ya, cutie If you love someone you would go to the end of the world for them! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I am not and have never been a little girl, so I don't know if this would be my dream life  I think this certianly would fit society's view of a dream life. Good job on the poem And I noticed something, you spend a lot of time in the youth, up to marraige, and then skip to death. I'm sure something must go on between marraige and death But good poem  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this. I haven't been a girl either, ok well maybe once! But anyway....SHHHHHHH!! But this poem was great, a wonderful, idealistic portrayal of what "should be". BUt hey.......life licks sometimes and it doesnt quite turn out so peachy keen. But great job!  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Nicely put curly. That would be very hard to achieve though. Life is never perfect. Without obstacles in life, how would you know what is good and what is bad. Without pain and suffering, how would you know how it feels to be happy....you see were I'm getting at? It's all the hardships in life that allows us to appreciate the good things. If everything was good, how would we even know it was good at all? We would just consider it part of life, nothing else. It won't be appreciated as much. I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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