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keoni
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since 2000-10-16
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Up in the mountains in the NFC

0 posted 2000-11-01 05:40 PM



You don't give a damn if  I still care
You don't even know if I'm still here
You just want to play the games
Gettin' numbers and takin' names
You don't want it to be too much
Don't want to be no one's crutch
I just want to hold you in my arms
While your pouring on all the charm
I'll get too close, you'll turn on me
Cause you'd rather just party
You don't want the rules, they seem no fun
The rules that come with loving someone
You're giving up on the best thing
Running away for some dumb fling
This type of thing is hard to find
It doesn't happen all the time
I hope one day you'll miss my touch
No one else will love you quite as much
I hope you can live your life happily
Maybe I'll come and see your family
Who knows where you'll finally be
But don't expect to turn and see me

© Copyright 2000 Jon - All Rights Reserved
Dopey Dope
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1 posted 2000-11-01 06:01 PM


This was nice. You still care but then you say it's like......"no...you wont see me...dont expect it......".....so it's like your moving on and stuff....or trying to convince yourself you are. I try to convince myself on a lot of things.....
have fun.
good post!



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

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Erin
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since 2000-06-15
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~Chicago~
2 posted 2000-11-01 06:59 PM


Well its good to hear that you arent gonna wait around...Good for you...If she really cared then she wouldnt do this to you...You made this very clear...Let her know how its going with you...

~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

keoni
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since 2000-10-16
Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC
3 posted 2000-11-01 07:59 PM


Erin, you are always so full of good advice. Actually I did tell her this, more or less. Things went bad 2 days ago. I told her that I loved her but that it wasn't enough. I said I had given her everything and she still wants more. I told her she could call me when she figured out what she wanted and how we could fix things. The end of that, for awhile...
                            Keoni

Lakewalker
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4 posted 2000-11-02 03:00 PM


Well, I do think Erin already covered the advice, but you did a good job of expressing your feelings here, the poem is good

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

Acies
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5 posted 2000-11-03 11:27 PM


It seems like I either follow Erin's or Lakewalker's replies.  

I too agree with Erin on this.  I hate to say this, but she is right  

keep up the good work and keep sharing

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


curlygurly
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since 2000-09-12
Posts 276
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6 posted 2000-11-04 05:31 PM


This was an awesome poem keoni! I hope to see more!  
Curlz


"So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside"
-Lenny Kravitz


Erin
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~Chicago~
7 posted 2000-11-04 08:02 PM


Acire~How could you say that you hate to say I am right??? Awww you are bogus...I see what kind of friend you are...

Sorry keoni for taking up this space to say something to Acire...


~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

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