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Losing Humanity
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Losing Humanity |
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hoppy Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 271 |
Darkened night I came cryin', wanting you to save me. i found you were lyin', you can't save me. Life in your hands what shall it be, shall i bow my head and lose my humanity. forked tounge of pride pokes out their eyes, blind leading the blind It's you I despise! for the world that wouldn't let me be, it stole my life- and now my life Life in your hands what shall it be shall i bow my head and lose my humanity they stole our innocence- instealed within us pride; a neverending circulation of man locked up inside. dealing with the passions, all they teach is lust. the norms have torn us down, our minds turned to rust-- and i see life in their hands, you think you're free. you continue the search- but only He holds the key! aimlessly wondering in a sea of hate worrying about your life, only seeing what you ain't. Life in your hands what shall it be will you hold your head high Can you see beyond me. There's a fine line between genius and insanity. I have erased this line. -- Oscar Levant "Death is not the greatest loss in life. The greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live." |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hey this kicked butt. I liked this one a lot. Good thoughts and it's pretty deep. Not deep to the point i don't understand like a lot of my poetry which is bad sometimes hehe..... but this poem is deep with complete understanding. Good job, VERY well written. I love reading stuff from you, keep posting or i'll wither in a cess-pool of hemroidal disordered cows.   "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Nicely written Hoppy! I loved the depth of your thoughts in this piece, well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Yes, some deeper thoughts here, and I think you did a great job with them. The poem is nicely done! "shall i bow my head and lose my humanity" "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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hoppy Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 271 |
Thanks for the replies. glad to know someone thinks i reached some kind of depth. Would hate to sit atop the water all my life and wonder what it was to get wet Swift as a shadow, short as any dream; Brief as the lightning in the collied night, That in a spleen unfolds both heaven and earth, And ere a ma |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
WOW!!! The best I've read all night. keep it up. "they stole our innocence- instealed within us pride; a neverending circulation of man locked up inside. dealing with the passions, all they teach is lust. the norms have torn us down, our minds turned to rust-- and i see" What more can i say? I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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