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Rodeo Jones Junior Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 18San Jose, CA, USA |
I suppose its rather ludicrous of me to be posting a poem when I rarely post anything at all, but I really want to get it out there. Please, any and all reactions to the poem. Negative is good. If you don't feel comfortable posting scathing responses to this poem, but want to contribute them nonetheless, e-mail me at [email protected]. -Walking Sigh- I am just a walking sigh Heaving my breath as the days go by Boring excitement, tireless sleep I'm tied to the ground but wish I were high I need to escape from the world that I see Of all of my wants, I want most to be free Moody and steady, Serene and uneasy I just want to leave this shell that is me I bask in the sunlight and try to forget That which I want but never will get Wealthy and poor, living but dead I sigh once again, and face my regret Thanks for your time. "Where is fancy bread, in the heart, or in the head?" |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Wow. I LOVED it. wow. wow. phew. wow. ~Carly The grindstone of life will either polish us or wear us down, depending on what we're made of. |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
That is great! I really liked this poem. Excellent, maybe you should post more often. Keoni |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
one word for this poem: NICE!!!! it is so great  keep it up!!~*Pixie*~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was a great poem. I liked the message and the style a lot. The ryhme scheme was very nice and id like to see more of your work around here....... be happy buddy.....you seem a bit tight.... we're all friendly down here.  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Rodeo Jones Junior Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 18San Jose, CA, USA |
I can't say happiness is something I do so well. Isn't that a lyric to a song? Who knows. Maybe I will post more - who knows... "Where is fancy bread, in the heart, or in the head?" |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I liked this a lot and encourage you to post more I would say this is a very good poem overall. I'd just like to say one thing negative about the poem, I had a hard time with the flow of it for some reason, but that is most likely just me not being able to concentrate But anyway, good job and post some more for us to see please!"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
This is the first I have read by you and I cant wait to read more...I hope that you do share it with us too... ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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Slim Junior Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 49Kentucky, USA |
wow.. i really liked this... this is the first i have also seen of you on here. i rarely post too, but im trying to more often. you should also.. it'd be nice to see more from you.. keep it up! Slim |
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Slim Junior Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 49Kentucky, USA |
wow.. i really liked this... this is the first i have also seen of you on here. i rarely post too, but im trying to more often. you should also.. it'd be nice to see more from you.. keep it up! Slim "just because you dont know it or havent seen it, doesnt mean it isnt possible" |
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Slim Junior Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 49Kentucky, USA |
Sorry for the double post! |
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