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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI 
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This is a senryu. I've decided to wander over to Teen Explorer(due to Lakewalker's begging). So here's the response to his challenge. Streaming. Staining cheeks; I have tasted far too much. When will they subside? |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
HA ha i get this one ha ha remember when i critized someones work on accident cuz i said it didnt make since well this one does and its good i just still dont get how to write like that..... "what doesnt kill you only makes you stronger" |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful Senryu Child of the Stars! Perfect syllable structure and well contained thoughts. Great work! Glad to see Lakewalker talked you into this, you've done well!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Oh, challenge well met I think you've done a great job on this, the thoughts you've written relate to everyone at some point in their life. Thank you for sharing this "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was amazing. I thought this kicked serious butt. Great job!  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
U did a really good job on this one. Keep it up. I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Child~ I like this one alot...I have found that I like writing these once I took Lakewalker's Challenge...Keep it up...I hope to see more of these too!!! ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey! Thanks to everyone for your replies, they make me smile. Stay cool all you peeps!!! ~Carly Forever has ended, and never came too soon... |
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