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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV 
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She saw me today And gave me a look She must have known Cause I heard what She had to say. ‘Oh I guess she knows’ Well, yea I know He loves me and Showed me the letter She tried the same thing Last year, with my best friend But this tyme she didn’t succeed I didn’t do anything to her All I did was love you ~*~Tamma M. Offenstein~*~ If you love someone dont put their name in a heart, put their name in a circle, because a heart can be broken but a circle is continious. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey! This was great, I'd suggest a title but I'm not really a title person. Anyways...stay cool... ~Carly The grindstone of life will either polish us or wear us down, depending on what we're made of. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Tamma, I'm horrible at titles! You may not have one here, but this poem is still really good. I think this is the most important part of the poem because it tells how much he must love you (that's what I felt anyway): "I didn’t do anything to her All I did was love you" "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
this was a really great poem! i especially liked the last two lines!  Curlz "I feel fine enough I guess considering everything's a mess" Barenaked Ladies |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well it's good you were mature about all of it. Good job and nice poem.  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Tamma~ I agree with Dopey...That you acted mature instead of how some girls act...Good work!!! ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
Well, Thank you all for replying, i would have thanked you sooner, but i was out of town, from Thursday morning til about 9 last night. If you love someone dont put their name in a heart, put their name in a circle, because a heart can be broken but a circle is continious. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Hey Erin and Dopey are agreeing now. See what poetry can do to them  I do too agree with Dopey. Look at me, I said the same thing  Thanks for the read Tamma. Keep it upI see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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